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by Julie Adams

two pools of lava churn in my cheeks
burn from the inside out

flesh boils, blotches with anger
gut neck limbs taut, I implode

the pressure cooker is bust
the windowpane shatters

I sink, an iron anchor
I scrape the seafloor

broken by a boy, as the story goes
broken by love, a symphony of clichés

it deafens, this poisonous madness
mute, dumb, struck

only poetry trickles from me now
a relentless nosebleed on paper

pierced, jaded, sentenced
the serpent coils, rattles

flames lick my eyes
black smoke yet to clear

survivors, perhaps
no one I know


Posted on 02/16/2011
Copyright © 2021 Julie Adams

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Sarah Graves on 02/16/11 at 02:52 AM

I like how you bring the imagery of earth and it's instability into this piece, taking into account many of the elements. Also, I think these earthly and mythical images can be cliche but you seem to use it to your advantage. great read. :)

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 02/16/11 at 01:34 PM

I only hope a poem in which emotion and imagery are interwoven so intricately can begin to provide catharsis, Julie

Posted by Tom Goss on 02/16/11 at 08:01 PM

Awesome, it really builds up and delivers. I think I've read it 10 times. ;) Your voice is strong here.

Posted by Joe Cramer on 02/17/11 at 04:39 AM

... exquisite.....

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/17/11 at 05:28 PM

Excellent descriptiveness jewels, from start to finish. Sounds like the perfect 'internal' storm. I especially like these lines: only poetry trickles from me now a relentless nosebleed on paper

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 02/18/11 at 12:56 AM

Startlin imagery! Intensity of emotion. At this point a sense of despair, of hopelessness.

Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 02/19/11 at 05:46 PM

this piece is so brutal! i love the ending

Posted by Ava Blu on 03/02/11 at 12:00 AM

You're raw and I love it.

Posted by Wendy Geal on 09/07/11 at 01:42 PM

LOVE! The ending especially and "broken by a boy, as the story goes broken by love, a symphony of clichés" - No matter what words escape, it always feels cliche. You are brilliant though.

Posted by Gail Wolper on 06/30/13 at 08:37 PM

The narrator is way too hard on himself! Bleed on!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/17/15 at 05:16 PM

An intense read. I'm glad I got a chance to enjoy it. Congrats on POTD!

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