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Implosion
by Julie Adamstwo pools of lava churn in my cheeks
burn from the inside out
flesh boils, blotches with anger
gut neck limbs taut, I implode
the pressure cooker is bust
the windowpane shatters
I sink, an iron anchor
I scrape the seafloor
broken by a boy, as the story goes
broken by love, a symphony of clichés
it deafens, this poisonous madness
mute, dumb, struck
only poetry trickles from me now
a relentless nosebleed on paper
pierced, jaded, sentenced
the serpent coils, rattles
flames lick my eyes
black smoke yet to clear
survivors, perhaps
no one I know
02/15/2011 Posted on 02/16/2011
Copyright © 2024 Julie Adams
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Sarah Graves on 02/16/11 at 02:52 AM I like how you bring the imagery of earth and it's instability into this piece, taking into account many of the elements. Also, I think these earthly and mythical images can be cliche but you seem to use it to your advantage. great read. :) |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 02/16/11 at 01:34 PM I only hope a poem in which emotion and imagery are interwoven so intricately can begin to provide catharsis, Julie |
| Posted by Tom Goss on 02/16/11 at 08:01 PM Awesome, it really builds up and delivers. I think I've read it 10 times. ;) Your voice is strong here. |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 02/17/11 at 04:39 AM ... exquisite..... |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/17/11 at 05:28 PM Excellent descriptiveness jewels, from start to finish. Sounds like the perfect 'internal' storm. I especially like these lines: only poetry trickles from me now
a relentless nosebleed on paper
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| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 02/18/11 at 12:56 AM Startlin imagery! Intensity of emotion. At this point a sense of despair, of hopelessness. |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 02/19/11 at 05:46 PM this piece is so brutal! i love the ending |
| Posted by Ava Blu on 03/02/11 at 12:00 AM You're raw and I love it. |
| Posted by Wendy Geal on 09/07/11 at 01:42 PM LOVE! The ending especially and "broken by a boy, as the story goes broken by love, a symphony of clichés" - No matter what words escape, it always feels cliche. You are brilliant though. |
| Posted by Gail Wolper on 06/30/13 at 08:37 PM The narrator is way too hard on himself! Bleed on! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/17/15 at 05:16 PM An intense read. I'm glad I got a chance to enjoy it. Congrats on POTD! |
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