Saturation: Melting Point

by Therese Elaine

More and more
I wake up
to find myself
spilled across
smooth surfaces

spread out
stretched out
so thin
until I've damn near dissolved;

there's only the silence to soak me up

Seeped into delicate
cracked composure fissures,
collected at the bottom of
eloquently disguised
empty spaces...

...and I become
an expanse of ocean,
once contained inside
a heart that was too small
to keep me

it's easy to bleed out this way


Posted on 10/05/2010
Copyright © 2021 Therese Elaine

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by V. Blake on 10/06/10 at 12:03 AM

I gave you my feedback on this personally already, so I'll just vote you up. See you in the top ten. :)

Posted by Anita Mac on 10/06/10 at 03:17 AM

That stanza and then the last line at the end are just so... perfect. Everything about this piece pulls in and together for me. I love it...

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 10/06/10 at 12:39 PM

That second to last stanza is a gem, so complete it could stand alone. Wonderful poem, Therese!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/06/10 at 05:46 PM

Quite brilliant how you make me feel everything become completely liquid in this. I especially like this phrase - "eloquently disguised empty spaces..." while the end line gives such vivid finality.

Posted by Paul Lastovica on 10/06/10 at 09:21 PM

silence is ever ready to take one in as it's own. As for the empty spaces, watch your, step darling ;)

Posted by Glenn Currier on 10/15/10 at 11:09 PM

Every stanza has something to look into - trying to peer through the deep goblet of fine wine you are - but never seeing the bottom. This is a real gem, Therese. Thanks.

Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 05/26/11 at 06:23 AM

wow, i read this a long while ago, and didn't know what to say then, like i don't know what to say now, this is fantastic and so much more.

Posted by Laura Doom on 10/02/11 at 01:41 PM

Ah, soak me up and bleed me out...
this must be my second home

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/04/12 at 03:52 AM

Good to see this as POTD!

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