Thanks for letting me tag along on your adventure and giving me a peak into dreams, fears, joys, hopes, and desires. This was a fun read but also very though-provoking. I kept trying to see myself in your search, trying on your vision. What I like about it is the mixing of a search for the mundane with the search for deeper meaning. Thanks, George.

i pictured this sung / growled; all gritty and low-tone; in a poorly-lit-smokey-club kind of way.

This seems like somewhat of a departure for you. I like how the random stream-of-consciousness lines somehow form a cohesive whole, and the last line ties it up nicely.

Really like the use of aliteration throughout this. Also in how it leaves the interpretation soley to each individual who reads it.