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Yes. This is sarcasm. (haiku)

by A. Paige White



           morning sun forgets
                              to whisper of the clouds
                                   new patience forms



06/22/2010

Author's Note:







while waiting for my Mom's *number to be called for her blood
to be drawn...On a hot morning;
my observation of a loud mouth's instructions
to a companion filling out her new patient forms...

*268 in Issa Speak ....for you Chaz :-> p.s. if you click the little frog in the left corner, it gives you the history of that particular ku...

Posted on 06/22/2010
Copyright © 2021 A. Paige White

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 06/22/10 at 05:17 PM

...Paige, tell people that you know me! i will be in grand company. a wonderfully-put haiku; you honestly transcended, as only the good ones[re: haiku-ers]all the word, words, and the and becomes an ellipsis...i love this paige, and looking at 'patience' is an ellipsis in itself, your creation shows, dear...now go put it back.nnaanhahahahaha

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 06/22/10 at 07:24 PM

So much going on here. I could never pull that off in haiku form. Well done.

Posted by Joan Serratelli on 06/22/10 at 08:20 PM

You made your point so well. This is visuaaly attractive. I especially liked the "author's note"

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/24/10 at 12:51 PM

I really like this haiku. No need for an explanation about its origin. In fact IMHO your author's note would make a good poem in itself with a little expansion. As a life long sky and cloud watcher, this poem hits pleasantly close to home. Thanks for sharing it Paige.

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/11/12 at 09:33 PM

morning sun may forget about clouds but the evening one who has a memory sharper than elephants never does, before it sets completely, it doesn't forget to warms the bellies of said clouds, because for those clouds its going to be a long chilly ride till dawn.

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