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by Steven Kenworthy



you ate the rain and poured it out on me
when i told you i was made of electricity
you clawed through the storm doors to your destiny
you wrote me up for envy
envy

we need something like symmetry
there’s no symmetry

can we combine our energy?
make it something like symmetry

you ate the ecstasy and poured it out on me
when i told you i was made of purity
you clawed through the storm doors to your destiny
you wrote me up for envy
envy

we need something like symmetry
there’s no symmetry

can we combine our energy?
make it something like symmetry

you ate the rain and poured it out on me
when i told you i was made of electricity
you clawed through the storm doors to your destiny
you wrote me up for envy
envy

we need something like symmetry
there’s no symmetry

can we combine our energy?
make it something like symmetry

you ate the ecstasy and poured it out on me
when i told you i was made of purity
you clawed through the storm doors to your destiny
you wrote me up for envy
envy

we need something like symmetry
there’s no symmetry

can we combine our energy?
make it something like symmetry

you ate the pillow and poured it out on me
when i told you i was suffocating
when i didn’t know what was good for me
you poured it out on me

i wrote you up for mercy
mercy


05/19/2010

Author's Note: a quiet hug in the middle of the forest

Posted on 05/19/2010
Copyright © 2024 Steven Kenworthy

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Nanette Bellman on 05/19/10 at 06:17 AM

I'm not sure if this is the right assumption but I'm making it anyway. This seems a little dryer and less warm and fuzzy then a typical SK piece. I can see your vulernability in this (this is the assumption I'm taking about) and it's very nice to see that side of you. I'm here for you if you need anything.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 05/19/10 at 08:55 PM

...got the wishes over heyar! wish i'd written this...just e'now of connecting rhythms and slighty different[though very heavy of a small difference!] all thru this lullabye de heartbreak, eh. i'm liking this one, too much.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 05/20/10 at 01:44 AM

as keanu reeves would say, "whoa!" is this set to some kind of trance music? love it! xopk

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 05/21/10 at 10:09 PM

I like how you've focused the intensity into a repetitive style here. I especially like the use of "ate the..." and "poured it out on me". A song, for sure.

Posted by Melissa Arel on 05/22/10 at 03:22 AM

i definitely see the points & thoughts the above people made about this poem. its original to your typical writing style but even the repetitive simplicity is powerful. made me feel like you were almost baring your soul in a way - raw & exposed. another gem my friend.

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