Evolutionary Yours, Max

by Max Bouillet

A former friend and I
raced up our DNA

A double helix
is far more slippery and fragile
than those animations
on the Discovery Channel

Anyway, my friend won
and became God.

At that moment,
I knew what the
Neanderthals thought
when they saw
those sleek pretty Homo sapiens
coming in from the south...



Posted on 05/09/2010
Copyright © 2022 Max Bouillet

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 05/11/10 at 09:29 PM

Love it.

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 05/12/10 at 05:22 PM


Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 05/13/10 at 08:27 PM


Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 05/14/10 at 02:11 AM

I have to come back now that I've calmed down - I really like the use of the double helix as an object on which one can race, especially the S3 jab at the friend becoming God, and the Neanderthals' economy of words upon seeing the newcomers. Well done.

Posted by Laura Doom on 05/14/10 at 10:20 PM

...and I thought: "Who would want to win that race? [so inhumanely human -- makes you want to shed a tier :]
Good to see you writing again Max... (and when was this potd?)

Posted by Wendy Sparling on 05/19/10 at 05:27 AM

Congratulations on your POTD. Welcome back! Oh, and your poetry rocks to.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 05/19/10 at 02:54 PM

Good one Max, glad to see you posting again...CharMin

Posted by Angela Cotterman on 05/19/10 at 03:36 PM

Ha! LOVE the final stanza and end word!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 05/19/10 at 03:48 PM

welcome back Max and presenting us this POTD which speaks beyond volumes and is a tribute to your fine art.

Posted by A. Paige White on 05/19/10 at 04:14 PM

Welcome back and congratulations on POTD, you jerk!

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