| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 02/21/10 at 07:59 PM I, too have "demons". I think eyerone has demons who haunt. This piece is nicely crafted. I love the images. Thanks for sharing! |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 02/21/10 at 10:36 PM ... a wonderful write..... |
| Posted by V. Blake on 02/22/10 at 01:30 AM Possibly my favorite thing of yours. That first stanza is brilliant, and the rest of the poem just follows suit. Awesome write, Clara. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/22/10 at 02:54 AM There is a kind of breaking apart in this that I really like. |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 02/22/10 at 10:04 AM The demons in this poem hold the story behind it. I love the allusion you made to smoke and halos. The parrallelism and imagery is equally awesome. This is the best of your's I've read I think. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 02/24/10 at 07:14 PM The loneliness and sadness in this are palpable. It takes a poet to get into a scene like this - actual or imagined. You did it well. Thanks for another brilliant piece, Mel. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 03/16/10 at 12:16 AM A few aspects of this piece stand out, and make it, as a whole, stand out; the changes in tense offer different ways (projective/retrospective) in which to view the scene; some instances of ambiguity, like soft screams that tear / without herself and intriguing imagery, such as suckled by the drain. These shades of style and technique offer colourful viewing, despite the subdued tone, and the final line adds weight to conjecture. Serious writing Clara... |
