| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/25/10 at 07:36 PM Oooooh...I love this -I have been that girl (sans long chestnut hair) -and oh, the wondering that does occur!!! |
| Posted by Christine Thibeault on 01/25/10 at 08:04 PM Great job melissa...very well done. The way in which you "stacked" your poem almost looks like a stack of books..at least that's how I picture it. Luv ya |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/25/10 at 08:04 PM There are few poems I would categorize as "adorable." This is one of them. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 01/25/10 at 08:15 PM Was she ready for lunch?? Cute write lady. Very enjoyable. |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/26/10 at 06:39 AM And this truly has its own perfect ending. A spectacularly solid write, Melissa. |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 01/26/10 at 02:02 PM the image in the first line sparkles! my fave: "a shoe dangles curiously from her toe as the words skip and spill from the pages onto her lap." As always, you capture a moment like no other! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/26/10 at 05:12 PM Most enjoyable descriptions of this whole scene and a romantic side note that adds to the story. Thank you. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 01/26/10 at 08:19 PM Whatever the denouement, the ending is fine as it is...a 3-D piece with a light touch; should be a best-seller :> |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 01/26/10 at 10:33 PM To be a reader, a mere passerby in pathetic this week is truly a delight for the poetry and game play is at an all time high of talent and fun. Excellent work, love the words spilling and the latte balancing as is the shoe dangling, great metaphor and perfect ending. smh |
| Posted by Nanette Bellman on 01/27/10 at 05:27 AM I love how you turned this beautiful piece about literature into literature. Very clever. Makes me want to pick up a good book and get lost and find something I'm looking for. |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 01/27/10 at 01:51 PM the exquisite detail of this piece feels more like a canvas or short film on the page...ur words paint the moving image we see, stellar write poet...the pleasure all ours, kudos...peace, jewels |
| Posted by Carolyn Coville on 02/07/10 at 04:47 AM What a sweet image! I feel as if I'm there, sneaking a peek at all of this going on... |
