| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/25/10 at 06:09 AM I don't know if this was intended, but the right column of text is a poem in and of itself. The left one isn't, however. I imagine it would be very difficult to make two columns of individual poems that weave together into one, but if you could, it would be incredibly impressive. I like what you've got here regardless. |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/25/10 at 06:15 AM New idea: Changing the "others write poetry" to "others use poetry" would make it work! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/25/10 at 04:09 PM I'm still not getting the sense of the left column, but the right is cool and the blending of the two I like a lot. |
| Posted by Nanette Bellman on 01/26/10 at 05:04 AM I like how this is two poems in one. Very clever and very true. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/26/10 at 05:13 AM I really love how this came out -three poems in one, working in tandem and separately -very cleverly done!!! I am pondering my own experiment now -and I might even be...gasp...brief!!! *grin*
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| Posted by Rachel Bennett on 01/27/10 at 01:23 AM You say this is just a gimmick, but I really enjoy it! Awesome work! |
| Posted by Nicole D Gregory on 01/28/10 at 12:52 AM Even your title is three potential titles for each side and/or the whole. I like all three pieces, and if I were clever and cool like you; I might be able to pull this off... This is inspiring in what you have done and leaves me in awe in what has been achieved! ;) ~N |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 01/28/10 at 02:35 PM I think the left column can be interpreted as a coherent, self-contained poem, given a degree of poetic licence in interpretation.
L3:
we see it -- 'it' being the essence of a poem/the nature of poetry, in the form of a lesson (provided it has been learnt).
L4:
...(as) something...
An individual instance of a poem, used as a tool to achieve something that can 'be'; the poem itself is ephemeral, effectively dead as soon as it's 'finished', at least for the writer (as 'writer'). It exists thereafter in the imagination, and according to the interpretation(s), of the reader. (?)
The theme is solid, perceptive and creatively structured. |
| Posted by Johnny Crimson on 01/28/10 at 03:58 PM The left side IS POETRY TO. There are no rules! Do what you want. Don't listen to anyone. No offense. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 01/29/10 at 12:27 AM A very nice write Michael. |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/29/10 at 04:53 PM Very clever! I like the sentiments of all three poems. This is definately something unexpected and I appreciate the sentiments too.
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| Posted by Julie Adams on 01/29/10 at 11:15 PM I love when poems get creative graphically, keep the eyes leaping and finding new ways to digest this piece...lovely piece(s) and a sound whole!! kudos to u poet, jewels |
| Posted by Mo Couts on 06/20/11 at 02:42 PM This is really, really cool! Great formatting. I enjoyed it immensely :) |
| Posted by Kris Mara on 03/01/12 at 12:48 AM incredible. love how it says so much so simply, so cleverly...it's actually three in one...and reads effortlessly... |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 03/05/12 at 12:28 AM excellent job on blending the three and separating them too. |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 03/06/12 at 02:17 AM Really good suggestion. When I first read this, right after you'd posted it, and saw the layout, the first thing I did was see if the two columns made individual poems. I'm glad Vince suggested that you do that, and I LOVE that you did it!! I really really like this! |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 03/09/12 at 02:07 PM Poetry cannot be taught- it can only be written if it's felt. I loved the separation |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/18/15 at 01:37 AM Much truth and wisdom here, Michael. I like how this moves full circle in the way the text reflects the title. Cool piece! |
