| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 01/12/10 at 01:33 AM Just damn stunning all over the place. |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 01/12/10 at 01:59 AM Wow, amazing how you formd those words and yet the way you chose to fill them in was certainly not forced. Indeed the flow was very natural and effective. Powerful last stanza especially. No need to modify your words here. They are perfect :) |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/12/10 at 05:28 AM Definitely, one of the best, if not the best, acrostic poem, I've ever seen. If I were capable of envy, I might just envy you for your talent, Vince. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/12/10 at 05:52 PM This is gut-wrenching for me...simply brilliant...but then, I'm used to that from you! |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 01/13/10 at 03:02 AM ...vince, i'm concerned that ole' Michael doen't know envy...my gosh it's my bed mate...i am as astounded as others on this ditty. a slam-dunk in polars...you squeeze the tiniest[but loudest!] meaning out of each line. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 01/13/10 at 03:03 AM ...i am playing with my envy as i type. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/15/10 at 01:32 AM I enjoyed the extra touch of color, the immediate bite of teeth, and the ledge you leave me on. Thank you. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/15/10 at 05:31 PM Your poetry has teeth. How do you stand yourself? ;) |
| Posted by Melissa Arel on 01/15/10 at 07:24 PM awesome man, really. |
| Posted by Ava Blu on 01/15/10 at 08:00 PM hopefully people will learn from you |
| Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 01/15/10 at 10:18 PM everything about this piece is stunningly clever, from the title on, nicely done. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/16/10 at 04:14 PM Clever and an outstanding use of wordplay to convey an emotion! |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 01/16/10 at 06:18 PM Though it's aesthetically pleasing, I'd like to have read this without the acrostic signature in blood; then I'd have felt really dumb for not having noticed the form :> Anyway, I do like the contrast between presentation/colour and the poetry, written with a minimalist approach; not over-modified or embellished. Oxygen and odium -- I can't imagine a more compelling collaboration...
Thanks for this thing. |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 01/16/10 at 07:25 PM ...I find this very appealing and I am adding to my favorites. (I normally don't care for the acrostic style but this one is excellent) |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 01/19/10 at 10:40 PM Like the color and the intention of this poem...smh |
