Snow i

by Jason Wardell

It       starts        off       light
and cool snow fills in
the gaps within my stories
but it’s deafening and freezing
angular and sharp and overwhelming and
my memory freezes over when it becomes


Posted on 11/29/2009
Copyright © 2023 Jason Wardell

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by V. Blake on 11/29/09 at 06:28 AM

This is so many different kinds of awesome that I can't even count them. I wasn't expecting anything too mind-blowing when I read the title, but I was definitely wrong about that. I'd rate it higher if the site let me, but adding it to my favorites will have to suffice.

Posted by Ava Blu on 11/29/09 at 03:29 PM

speechless. as I often am when reading your work. you and I, in my opinion, share very similar strengths with our words. I'd love to collab with you, if ever we could.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/29/09 at 05:18 PM


Posted by Laurie Blum on 11/30/09 at 02:40 AM

The creative format takes a good poem and makes it a great one! Very entertaining!

Posted by Glenn Currier on 11/30/09 at 05:12 PM

That penultimate line is sheer genius. I too like the creative line spacing and how it makes gaps in the poem reflective of the gaps you allude to in the poem. This poem is profound and thought-provoking. It makes me want to go inward to examine myself and what frozenness might be there. I am with Vince in his praise. Thanks, Jason.

Posted by Nanette Bellman on 11/30/09 at 10:51 PM

I've always loved how you date your pieces then pick a subject to title them as well. This piece is exception. I definetly think your format and play on the words makes it much more touching.

Posted by Leonard M Hawkes on 12/01/09 at 06:37 AM

It makes me think of "Silent Snow, Secret Snow."

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 05/21/14 at 03:51 PM

Excellent to see this as POTD!

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