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I am singing to you, can you hear me?

by Elizabeth Jill




I listened for your footsteps on the water
I felt your warm springs growing hotter hotter
and I sank in your suns
and I drank from your moons
I came home to you in ruins

I saw your candles glowing in the fortress
with children's faces pressed against the stained glass
and I drowned in your love
and I swam in your anger
never knowing what they were

I marvel that your poetry has crossed the sea
I feel you in my mind you are a part of me
and I visit you in these books
where no scholar ever looks




11/19/2009

Posted on 11/19/2009
Copyright © 2022 Elizabeth Jill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jo Halliday on 11/19/09 at 05:26 PM

Marvellous! So from the heart.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 11/19/09 at 05:29 PM

...eliza beth, now ever one's gonna know you're tawkin' about me...great write, doll.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 11/19/09 at 07:38 PM

Yes, crystal clear, like a butterfly with frail blue wings. And I look up from the happy earth and hear you also sing. Lovely, Jill! Thanks.

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 11/19/09 at 11:51 PM

I can't describe the feelings this invokes, but they are intensely amazing.

Posted by A. Paige White on 11/20/09 at 03:11 AM

"I listened for your footsteps on the water"
and I was bowing when tall angels shook the treetops just to watch the leaves fall. But you knew that didn't you sweet Elizabeth? You've seen when fall is fell. Lovely. Absolutely exquisite. Thank you for sharing this beautiful part of you. We're all enriched.

Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 11/20/09 at 11:33 AM

I have read this many times. I plan to comment later tonight. For now,just know,I love this.

Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 11/22/09 at 11:28 AM

When I first commenced reading, my first impression was of a spiritual nature."Footsteps on the water" immediately brought the thought of Jesus, walking on the water. And in the second stanza,"the church" comes to mind. But the third stanza made me realize this is possibly about an unnamed poet.It makes me wonder which books are those no scholar ever looks. The Bible has been scrutinized by scholars for centuries and is filled with poetry....but it seems to me scholars look no longer or they simply look but don't see......Anyway, the ambiguity allows me to read this on several levels and I like being able to chew on the possibilities. :)

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 11/22/09 at 12:29 PM

to read this psalm is to be shaken to the dregs of one's soul and to rise again so as to feed to read and to read to feed on this is to be flown to the limits of one's soul o'er and o'er.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/22/09 at 09:29 PM

There is a marvelous surrender in these words, and relating on a very personal level. That last line intrigues and puts this on an "everymanwoman" level. Thank you.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 11/23/09 at 01:34 AM

Good one Liz.....CharMin

Posted by Sarah Wolf on 11/23/09 at 04:18 PM

Beautifully Romantic... such charm...

Posted by Laura Doom on 12/11/09 at 01:30 AM

you are beyond words
i am without my own

Posted by Jim Benz on 12/12/09 at 05:39 PM

Anything I might have to say about this poem would only mirror what others say. Particularly Clara. And more particularly Laura.

Posted by JD Clay on 07/17/10 at 05:28 PM

Inspiration is unfathomable as evidenced by your studied well of ink. What I see here is metaphor in grandeur. I love the way you resonate.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 07/28/10 at 01:02 AM

Embrace all the emotions and love all the poet's experience. This little poem is almost epic in its scope... it takes you through different lands and through the breadth of human emotion. Great read.

Posted by Jessica Yen on 08/17/10 at 05:46 AM

wow. i love the imagery here. just beautiful.

Posted by Aaron Michael on 09/19/10 at 06:20 PM

gorgeous. the dead and deaf can hear this. once again, you've stunned me.

Posted by Mo Couts on 06/20/11 at 09:50 PM

This is fabulously amazing! What a wonderful write, Elizabeth!

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