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the when
by Charlie Morganas everyone's story is a long one,
we shouldn't begin with yours.
let's start with mine, since it's
all about me anyway, saves time.
first there was nothing, then I.
but i wasn't by myself.
then i s'pose things started happening;
planetoids, suns, countless moons.
so when i arrived much was already done;
i merely got in line and followed.
felt good for the first 60 years or so;
now i need to get off this perch, stretch.
much to do with this new perspective;
everything is lower, newer heights.
it should all slow down pretty soon,
and let me be alone again. 09/29/2009 Posted on 09/29/2009
Copyright © 2026 Charlie Morgan
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 09/30/09 at 01:23 AM Edgy, this, and sad too. But the sadness doesn't necessarily soften the sharp points of it. You. And your precipice. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 09/30/09 at 02:08 PM I got a chuckle out of the second stanza - so Charlie. Then as I read, I kept thinking about the Greek gods and the way they mixed tragedy and awe. I think I understand something about the perspective thing. Sometimes it feels as if I am an observer - not a detached one but a connected one. It occurs to me that the way you slow down is in your writing. It is always a solitary, alone, activity. One last thing. One of the many things I like about you, Charlie, is your tongue-in-cheek admission that it is "all about Charlie." At least your tongue is in your cheek. Some of us are not nearly as honest and upfront about it. Sooooo... I will say it... after all, it is not all about Charlie, but it is all about Glenn. :-) |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 09/30/09 at 02:57 PM this piece has you all over it, you are the cosmos in which this poem is written, subject, narrator, and author...and I LOVE how time and space folds on themselves within this piece, all of time captured in 8 couplets...kudos! |
| Posted by Shannon McEwen on 10/01/09 at 05:52 AM have to agree, this is uniquely you, have I told you how much I love your perspective on things? |
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