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Cow Catcher
by David HillAll aboooard!
Janie has a lantern chin,
an extra sense
detecting sin.
It’s always
he she you they
he she you they
never me never me
never me never me
shoulda shouldn’t of
shoulda shouldn’t of
clickity clackity
clickity clackity
Woooo…Woooo…
She’s a steam train comin'
and I’m standin' on her track.
09/04/2009 Author's Note: She'd make a charming wife, er, make that carving knife...
Posted on 09/05/2009
Copyright © 2025 David Hill
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| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/05/09 at 03:58 AM "Janie has a lantern chin,
an extra sense
detecting sin." - Ok, this is just charmingly silly and I don't know what a lantern chin is, but I love image of it. The repetition in the "he she you they" stanza sets the train beat in motion and you carry it on through. The ending leaves me still watching for the big wreck, and I like that feeling of anticipation and excitement.
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| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/05/09 at 02:40 PM ...nahahahahahahaha too cool dave...too cool. they must come one to a person, eh? |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/09/09 at 02:13 PM Excellent use of train rhythms to deliver the message Dave. Priceless ending in those last two lines; love the implications and the pictures that spring to mind as a result. I too have found myself on those tracks...more than once! ;o) |
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