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Marble Teeth
by Wayne TateSifting through life in
my world of mirrors,
inexplicably pushing pearls
like gasoline matchsticks;
engaging embers on silver strings
I watched a smile while the sea
nibbled on sandy shores
touching past midnight;
entertaining the wind as I walked;
nodding to the woman next to me.
south by south-west
eastern standard time
Coming to rest next to driftwood
on the shoreline, I sucked in
new words of vocabulary;
needing a moment to gather
each intense connection that
collided with the sobering
transition that didn’t readily agree with the
inept inner-drunk who currently resides
on a beach somewhere
nodding to the woman next to me
What I woke up to was a deluge.
in each pounding pulse that traveled
north that midday morning, I found
divinity while worshiping a porcelain god
Heaven has a place for me... Somewhere there's
a sweet smelling tequila caress
in the arms of the brown-haired señorita that
remembered how I was nodding next to her. 06/20/2009 Author's Note: This is a brief musing for a dear friend of mine. 5 words: Smile, Intense, Connection, Wind, Hair. The mood: Alive. I even placed them into the first letter of each line. Not sure if I'm happy with the results though. I might try this one again.
ps- I just noticed that the lines "...who currently resides on a beach somewhere nodding to the woman next to me" kind of reminds me of Chris Farley's "...in a van down by the river" lol... ah well, If I can't laugh at myself, than who will laugh with me right?
Posted on 06/21/2009
Copyright © 2024 Wayne Tate
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 06/21/09 at 12:23 PM Well, I just love it,Wayne, especially the title. The whole thing just tickles my fancy. I am saving this one, but looking forward to seeing what you do with this, should you decide to revise. |
| Posted by Sarah Wolf on 06/21/09 at 05:22 PM Wayne what I appreciate about this piece is it demonstrates you have the ability to write in a variety of ways... I like that you are not stuck... that you have the creativity to branch out into a different path... a different flow... a different mood... Maybe not your best piece but still nice work in process... and progress... :) I admire you have the courage to present this piece even when not entirely satisfied with it as you have stated. Nice work as always... |
| Posted by Nicole D Gregory on 06/21/09 at 10:27 PM I just love the second stanza! WOW! It just resonated with me... the whole piece is amazing but just somehow I have been re-reading the idea of the water entertaining the wind. (sigh) The water has a life of its own and I love the way you expressed it. Thanks for sharing this AND Happy First Day of SUMMER!!! My favorite day EVER!!! ~N |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 06/22/09 at 04:44 PM So very very clever and evocative. I was amazed to see what you did with the five words. The images are enticing and intoxicating nibbling at that part of me that wants to leave for the Caribbean this afternoon. |
| Posted by V. Blake on 06/24/09 at 03:00 AM This is fantastic. I was enjoying it thoroughly before I even caught the fact that it was acrostic. And you're not sure if you're happy with it? I cannot imagine why not. Rated and favorited. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 06/09/11 at 02:38 PM This is very much "alive". The whole acrostic part blows my mind. I adore Stanza 3. Congrats on POTD! |
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