| Posted by Jo Halliday on 05/19/09 at 06:06 AM Works in a lot many more ways than one for me. Not simply evoking checkouts; life, noons, journeys, oh so many things. I love the last line especially, it could have been easy for a lesser writer to say "with bread crushed" or a cryptic "Bread crushed": the "My bread is crushed" is so emphatic in a lost cause and gives this such tragic power, a wryly tragic power! And also if you deliberately used "checkout" and not "check out" as a verb, then that was brilliant again. Cool, cool write! |
