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Another Crime

by Joan Serratelli

It seems that I
have committed another
crime
I let him sleep
instead of forcing
him to get up

I cannot win
I wonder why
I even try
He left the house
after exchanging
harsh words
that now echo
in my mind

He'll be back
and when
he arrives
I'm sure
we'll fight
again

Our life together
has become
a vicious circle
of love and hate
I dred him
walking
through the door
but yet
I'll be glad
to see him
Does that make
any sense?

I'm left here
to wonder why
I even try
to win


03/12/2009

Posted on 03/12/2009
Copyright © 2021 Joan Serratelli

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 03/12/09 at 07:07 PM

That last stanza is perfect, and I think the form you went with for the overall piece only adds to that last stanza being so effective.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 03/12/09 at 07:13 PM

You have teriffic perepective here, and as always you, "call 'em as you see 'em"....thanks.

Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 03/12/09 at 08:45 PM

oh, i hate it when that happens! you are so honest here that is hurts. hugs!

Posted by Razel Davies on 03/13/09 at 10:41 AM

"yet I'll be glad to see him", yes, it makes perfect sense. Love is often spoken of as an opposite to hate, but in fact it encompasses that emotion as well as all others. Not that you really feel hate in this case, but your hurt and pain come from the strength of your love.

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 03/14/09 at 03:20 PM

Sounds like he's become accustomed to misdirecting all the things he's mad about onto you. Sometimes people who resort to this are privately ashamed. Sometimes, with authentic discussion they can turn this destructive method of dealing with life around.
I hope it softens your pain to know that this stuff is NOT your fault. And it is likely , in the truth that he does love you, that this is a horrible learning phase he's going through. Still, the cruelty of explosive untrusty personalities stings seemingly endless. Write me.

Posted by Kristi Paik on 03/17/09 at 03:42 AM

Joan, it makes absolute sense. I really love this one, I see so much of you in this, I only hope you win in terms of what you really want from him. *BIG HUG*

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/17/09 at 04:46 PM

This poem adds a whole new meaning to "familarity breeds contempt." Well expressed Joan!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/17/09 at 04:47 PM

PS: Adds to favourites.

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