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black-eyed susan
by Kristina Woodhillyou can't kill my black-eyed susan
buddy boy, yeah, buddy girl
you may call her yellow,
picking petals, tryin' to choose
your world
you may think her center
is just too, too brown
her perky petals plain,
uncurled
you can't kill my black-eyed susan
buddy boy, yeah, buddy girl
her seed is wind free, out of reach
you've got no dirt on her
you can't blow your whistle
and yell "thistle!" at my
cool cardoon
his purple hat you might stomp flat
his color might not match
your room
you
might butter up his cousin
artichoke
yet clutch his throat
you can't blow your whistle
and yell "thistle!" at my
cool cardoon
his seed is wind free, out of reach
you've got no dirt on him
i've got the hands to untie knots
in lassoes you've thrown at their sun
i've got the punch to sieve the
buckets you've hung high to
stay their rain
but they don't need my hands
nor fear your heaving lasso
buddy boy
and they don't need my punch
nor fear your bucket's metal
buddy girl
their seed is wind free
out of reach
you've got no dirt on them
10/07/2008
Posted on 10/08/2008
Copyright © 2024 Kristina Woodhill
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/08/08 at 04:07 AM This has a really interesting folk song vibe to it. Really striking imagery and tone as well. |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 10/08/08 at 04:03 PM This is a wonderful and fun read Kristina. I love it! |
| Posted by James Zealy on 10/08/08 at 05:17 PM Very cool Kristina, I really like the flow, energy and fun. Most of all its fun. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 10/10/08 at 01:44 AM Magnificent write Kristina! And quite lyrical; I was singing the stanzas in my head as I read them. 5 Gold ***** ATF. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/10/08 at 06:41 PM Right, like it could be sung in a "round", just excellent. That keen eye/ear of yours towards nature, pays off big here. Thanks for the read. Delighted! |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 10/11/08 at 12:55 AM Definitely meant to be a choral read. Wonderfully engaging. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 10/11/08 at 05:02 AM I agree with the others, fun read...CharMin |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 10/14/08 at 05:18 AM A very rich and hilarious song- I love the depth and heights of it- linguistic and botanical play. I looked up "cardoon" which is such a great word" and it comes fro "wild thistle" in the Latin. Also the buttering the artichoke is so delicious. Very spicy writing. I love the lassoe to the sun as well. So many good details. |
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