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Boardwalk contest entry
by Kristina WoodhillInspired by Boardwalk
Long centuries, wise Rumi,
Since you slipped between the planks
Walked your steady walk
Into Beloved's waiting pool.
The path that seems
To me to end in drowning death,
To you was but a step
Into a welcoming
Engulf.
I stand above and stare -
I paint these planks so bare.
My clouded eyes
Pretend a surface tension,
Algae clogged;
"The sun," I hedge,
"has done its work
and forced the blooming
skin -
there's surely no way in!"
The bubbles from your laughter
Send small rippled
Joyful burps;
Perceptively
You smile
And flick cool water drops
Aloft
Dispersing
Clarity as droplets meet
The kissing sun,
Duality it's plaything,
Harsh to
Soft.
My toes tip at the edge
And there they falter,
Rocking back
Mocking me
They seek and snag
Protruding crookneck nails;
A coward, my step fails,
Holding Love at bay
Holding Love at bay
Your push reveals the way.
09/11/2008
Posted on 09/12/2008
Copyright © 2024 Kristina Woodhill
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Melissa Arel on 09/12/08 at 01:54 PM Such wonderful rhyme! Well done! I enjoyed reading it. |
| Posted by James Zealy on 09/12/08 at 06:51 PM Very lyrical and lovely. It has almost a fairy tale quality it. |
| Posted by Nancy Ames on 09/13/08 at 11:58 PM This is a beautifully crafted poem that touches deeply on the subject of a man's passion and the response, as a listener attends to a meaningful poem. This must be wonderful when read aloud too. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/14/08 at 10:15 PM A wonderfully sentimental and poignant look at what once was, and with time, is no more except in haunting memory. |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 09/29/08 at 08:18 PM congrats on the win. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 10/02/08 at 08:20 PM Congratulations on being one of the winners in the photopoetry contest.
Great descriptive, emotionally charge, poem. Excellent writing. |
| Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 10/07/08 at 01:27 PM What a read, I love the fourth stanza, the use of dual meanings very fitting here. Perfection. Marked a fav. |
| Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 10/14/08 at 10:23 AM Beautifully written. Loved this... "Dispersing
Clarity as droplets meet
The kissing sun,
Duality it's plaything,
Harsh to
Soft."
Congrats on POTD
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| Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 10/14/08 at 12:17 PM Kristina, this is exquisite - no wonder it was one of the contest winners. The imagery, the subtle rhyme, the homage to Rumi - it all works perfectly. A well-deserved POTD.... d:-) |
| Posted by Maria Massarella on 10/14/08 at 01:56 PM Wondrous inspiration, Poetry Queen ... in all ways ... Congratulations!!! |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 10/15/08 at 03:17 AM Congratulations on poem of the day Kris. Well deserved....CharMin |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 10/15/08 at 05:12 AM CONGRATULATIONS ON POTD! I'm so happy you are one of the winners, since you're one of my favorite poets on here (well, of course, I love others, too.) |
| Posted by Colleen Sperry on 10/19/08 at 11:51 PM congrats.. it's a lovely poem |
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