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penny's hiding in the telephone booth...
by Olivia Weinkeinpenny's hiding in the telephone booth,
all pigtails and torn stockings from
dreams that never surrendered.
& it's all gum on the bottom of your
shoe until someone gets hurt
every thing's for sale, baby
doesn't mean that every body wants it.
08/15/2008 Posted on 08/15/2008
Copyright © 2025 Olivia Weinkein
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 08/15/08 at 07:20 PM ...olivia, a cute[to some]pome, to me it is heavy with the same altitude and latitude of successful[published] poets who ply the art and in this lil' juxtaposition of [a girl named penny, read: the transitional phase o' all lil-girls-to-women] SAYING NOTHING YET IT IS SO LOUD--THE TORN HOSE-is cacaphonous, now that's one plane, then you bring in dreams that never surrendered[another plane] sequeing again to the gum on the bottom until someone[personalization of the us-ness] and in case someone[an ET] wants to know how these carbon units operate, well the last two lines sum up such, the devastion of known life, is captured in your last two lines...olivia, this is a wonderfully poetic drama cum comedy of tragdies...great.
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| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/15/08 at 07:30 PM I like how this runs pretty deep for such a short poem, leaving me wanting more. Excellent slice of wisdom in those closing two lines. Kudos! |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 08/15/08 at 08:14 PM Very well done lady. This comes about a close to 'text messaging' all of Shakespeare that I've seen. Short but packed with more than many will ever understand. |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 08/16/08 at 09:39 PM intense |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/19/08 at 02:33 PM Well done. This leaves me with down-to-earth gritty, city images and unspoken experiences that have left their marks. |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 08/20/08 at 08:21 AM Reminds me of something the villian might say to convince everyone else he's human just like the rest of us, but we know better... |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 08/20/08 at 04:57 PM Struck with awe, I am. There's more power and punch in this than any Olympic feat. |
| Posted by Olivia Martin on 08/22/08 at 02:13 AM Simply said, I was intrigued. I love it. Simple, to the point, and absolutely, positively amazing. Great write! |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 02/10/16 at 08:50 PM So glad you are still here and writing! |
| Posted by Johanna May on 02/12/16 at 12:07 PM Favorite! |
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