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Old Couple Passing [re-posted]

by Bruce W Niedt

He said she was the moon and the stars.
               He told her this for half a century.
So when she left,
               his heart which had entwined with hers                              
was ripped from a vine of veins.
 The breath they shared –								               
he breathing in as she breathed out –
                               became the still, humid air of an August day.
Their minds that had woven together,
               so each could finish the other’s thought,
                               came apart like a torn carpet,
the colored threads ragged and dangling,
               and his became one long question.
Yet through all this,
               the moon and stars were still there.
                               So when he left, only weeks later,
he pocketed the stars
               and carried the moon under his arm
                               like a rocky beach ball,
as though she’d asked him one last favor –
               would he bring them with him,
                               if he was coming soon anyway?

 

03/31/2008

Author's Note: Featured in the anthology Poetry Ink published by Moonstone Press, March 2008.

Posted on 03/31/2008
Copyright © 2026 Bruce W Niedt

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Nancy Ames on 04/01/08 at 12:12 AM

This is lovely and moving poetry.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 04/01/08 at 12:40 AM

Well, I just want to bawl - but this is too sweet and I've heard this happen to more than one couple. Stanzas 7 and 8 are my favs. Thank you.

Posted by Mary Frances Spencer on 04/01/08 at 03:45 AM

Great! MFS

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 04/01/08 at 03:48 AM

I believe this, and like Kristina mentioned...
I weep now...beautiful. -Jill

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 04/01/08 at 04:13 AM

Just beautiful.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 04/01/08 at 11:51 AM

Sweet sentiment to be sure Bruce. I in fact know a couple (I worked with him) that this could one day apply to.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 04/02/08 at 04:49 PM

...bruce, you got me on old folks...and then the pome toook off like the Baron Munchasen, asail thru all sorts of places in memind...lovely seque and i bet he does carry them to her, eh? charlie

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