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divide and rue
by Laura DoomOh, I could cry...
but that would be too easy
a strategy for sympathy
that merely gets me by.
Oh, I could scream...
but that's just melodrama
competing with my karma
for a victim to redeem.
Oh, I could smile...
but how contrived is that?
With my dignity intact
I could bluff it for a while.
Oh, I could sleep...
but then if, perchance, my dreams
bear my quietus to extremes
will I be in way too deep?
So, should I wait...
greet inertia with a kiss
and embrace paralysis
while telomeres decide my fate?
Oh, I could cry... 12/10/2007 Posted on 12/10/2007
Copyright © 2024 Laura Doom
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Rhiannon Jones on 12/10/07 at 01:09 PM I had to look up "telomeres"...it fits perfectly. "greet inertia with a kiss / and embrace paralysis"...great couplet! |
| Posted by Jim Benz on 12/10/07 at 07:38 PM I was going to say something really intelligent about this poem, but the synaptic response mechanism in my brain appears to have degraded. Still, nice circle of life you've presented here. I think I'll just smile, at least when I've finished screaming. |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/13/07 at 02:47 PM I like that third stanza. Well said. |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/16/07 at 03:53 PM I really like the rhyming scheme in this (and since so much rhyming, to me, detracts from the message itself, that's saying alot). All of our options and what they do for us...Nice!!! |
| Posted by Anita Mac on 12/17/07 at 02:08 AM Very eloquent... It reminds me of a silent rage, which I usually deal with by sleeping, honestly... Sometimes a different stanza wins me over, though. Very beautifully worded, and a nice pensive rhythm. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/18/07 at 05:34 AM Excellent...wish I had written this...glad you did. Adds a whole new definition to the name Laura Doom. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 12/18/07 at 08:35 PM Excellent range of emotion and how it is when dealing with them. I like the flow and rhyme. smh |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 12/19/07 at 04:43 PM Fascinating and moving blend of emotional, lyrically shaped response to experience. The "telomeres" underlie and threaten, suggest like the "cry" at each end. The poeised restraint yet intensity of feeling, with the one alluring, dramatic implied unknown. So life mirroring. "...I could cry..." |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 12/20/07 at 05:18 PM This is wonderful. You really know how to capture the reader and write a great and unique poem Laura! |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/20/07 at 08:26 PM I know this isn't intended to be a funny poem, but sometimes the frustration of life can get to be almost laughable that the only thing you can do is either laugh or cry. Or maybe a little of both at the same time?
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 12/22/07 at 11:46 AM reading this, I cannot help but do all the things
that divide and rue, I cry, I smile, I scream, how powerful and delicious this poem is to sip with eyes wide open. |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 01/13/08 at 12:51 AM D. All of the above. We must experience all emotions in order to realize why multiplication is better than division. :) |
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