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bright portal

by Mary Frances Spencer

i
don't see
the moon tonight
but i am only looking out the window

if i close my eyes
i can enter
that bright
portal
where you and i
and a thousand petals
are opening

up...

07/03/2007

Posted on 11/05/2007
Copyright © 2022 Mary Frances Spencer

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 11/05/07 at 06:43 AM

Beautiful and mysterious, I feel as if with closed eyes the moon can become a door into the dark amd you two enter. The beginning of this is subtle and unassuming and yet leads to "a thousand petals opening". Beautiful atmosphere and feeling.

Posted by Gira Bryant on 11/05/07 at 07:55 AM

I love this, Maryfrances.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 11/06/07 at 07:23 PM

Seeing with the heart and mind is often a clearer vision than with the eyes. Your words are beautiful and mystical. Yes, read Maria Massarella's poetry.
~Chelle~

Posted by Maria Massarella on 11/07/07 at 07:38 AM

when the thousand petals open maria says they 'lotus' and of luna she sees the heart - and she can so relate to your poem each time she closes her eyes. Welcome to PPS, Mary Frances ...

Posted by Meghan Helmich on 11/08/07 at 12:51 PM

the ending is magnificent - i've always loved the image of petals, like people, opening up in bloom. it's so sexual and suggestive but overall peaceful.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/08/07 at 03:50 PM

Very beautiful. There is a inner seeing here at play and the image of a thousand petals opening around the two of you creates a vision to the horizon. Quite fabulous.

Posted by W. Mahlon Purdin on 07/05/08 at 01:29 PM

"but i am only looking out the window" ... a truly poetic thought. Love the poem, MFS. Well done.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 11/17/08 at 11:09 AM

I've been away too long. What a gem MFS. I LOVE your work, and the amount of creativity you use. You inspire to do more than just write, but also present, an idea, moment or adventure with the the "look", like the "hook" in a song, of the words on the page!

Posted by Scott Utley on 02/09/09 at 08:19 AM

Perfect!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 12/20/11 at 02:40 PM

all the words that come to mind to describe these words of yours, all want to say beautiful, beautiful, and who am I to argue, who agree wholeheartedly.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/30/12 at 01:34 AM

Good to see this as POTD!

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