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anti-ku

by Jim Benz

all this time
sitting on benches
watching buses

***

this street
the other street
they all look the same

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down on the ground
too many drinks
not enough pity

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coughing up blood
a glimpse of skinny junkies
out my window

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no more time
the landlord pounding
on your door

10/02/2007

Posted on 10/02/2007
Copyright © 2020 Jim Benz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 10/02/07 at 07:14 AM

Hah-- I would say--a brilliant idea. Yes, no enlightenment moment, no bright surprise, no fresh insight... just anti-ku at the table looking out the window at the same old... what a mood you are in... and worth it for this!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/02/07 at 02:32 PM

Rough stuff - I like the concept.

Posted by Paul Lastovica on 10/02/07 at 06:31 PM

new work, at long last =) worth the wait indeed! it seems to me that each 'ku' grows more and more anti-ku along the way.

Posted by Sigurdur Haraldsson on 10/03/07 at 07:00 AM

Splendid work. The dreariness of life comes to life here. It made me laugh.

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 10/04/07 at 02:00 PM

I can feel the pounding, feel the pounding, feel the pounding.

You and your poems have been much missed, Jim. In your quiet world, are you? ;)

Posted by JD Clay on 10/07/07 at 03:55 AM

This is good stuff, Jim. Individual or as a set, perceptive, raw, Bohemian!

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 10/07/07 at 01:25 PM

Excellent title! Direct, sometimes monotonous, sometimes tragic, sometimes brutal, often anxious moments in a day.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 10/07/07 at 01:45 PM

Nice work Jim. I especially like 2 & 3.

Posted by Bethany Lee on 10/08/07 at 06:31 PM

the title is great and I can see this being written on the fly at the kitchen table, watching birds and passerby out the window...

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 10/08/07 at 08:42 PM

Excellent view of life, Jim, as varied as it gets each day. I totally relate to #'s 1 & 5.
~Chelle~

Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 10/09/07 at 09:14 PM

clarity of reality

Posted by Sarah Graves on 10/10/07 at 11:52 PM

Interesting concept here. I like how your find meaning in the meaninglessness of everyday life. The title drew me in, and really sets the tone well throughout this piece. There seems to be moments of sameness, but also moments that we would rather forget. Great read :)

Posted by Laura Doom on 10/14/07 at 05:54 PM

Senryu in nature [if that's not a contradiction in terms :], so I guess the title nurtures nested ambiguity, the alternative playing with a 'vintage' perspective on contemporary inertia...perhaps. 'Take 2' is invariably the strategy for my reading of your stuff :)

Posted by Nadia Gilbert Kent on 06/28/10 at 04:49 AM

Bye-ku!

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