Anxious for Another Dawn by Genevieve Sturrocki would call you my sun
though there are others
whose words are
more elegant than mine
those who are able to
spin tales of light and dark
sorrow and loss
far more eloquently than i
but i would call you my sun
for like a flower
i bask in the warmth
of your smile
and revel in the
brightness of your laughter
i would call you my sun
for i watched you slip away
leeching my world
of color and light
leaving me stranded
amidst an eclipse of emotion
i know intimately
and it fills me horror
i would call you my sun
for without your presence
i huddle in the darkness
fearful of the strangeness
that lives outside the
halo of your warmth
i would call you my sun
as i wrap myself in the
deep rich velvet blackness
of a night without end
tears clouding eyes
that cannot see anyway
i would call you my sun
all senses straining
reaching for any hint
of the receding of the dark
that would precede your return
i would call you my sun
for i am cold
lifeless
hollow
as i await
your dawn 08/28/2007 Author's Note: i thank Jeffrey Parren for the inspiration for this one.
Posted on 08/28/2007 Copyright © 2025 Genevieve Sturrock
Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 08/28/07 at 03:52 PM Ohhhh, sweet girl. The difficulties, though not specific enough to satisfy my deep desire for your peace of mind, drip with the pain you are feeling. *HUGS* |
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/28/07 at 04:54 PM A pleasantly poignant expression of attraction and dependence Gen. |
Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 08/28/07 at 08:54 PM The repetition of the naming "my sun" in this intimate relationship, gives a power to this poem, in the spirit of repeated days, and the wish for their return, as what can days mean, without the essential "dawn" in them. |
Posted by Melissa Arel on 08/29/07 at 01:53 AM This is excellent writing, Gen.. I really enjoyed reading it :) |
Posted by Tony Whitaker on 08/29/07 at 08:02 PM Wow! I loved the repetition of the first line and the power of the message. Fantastic piece Genevieve! |
Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/30/07 at 09:19 PM The progression or is it regression in this is wonderful. So emotional and excellent repetition of the first line. Your words make me want to crawl into a corner and wrap my arms around me.
~Chelle~ |
Posted by Ginette T Belle on 08/31/07 at 03:11 PM love the last stanza...very nice imagery |
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