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Relaxed & Reserved
by Anita MacIs this
a more comfortable Distance
for you?
A bit of time and effort,
but you seem more
relaxed
more your
charming
salesman
self
Do you think we can stay here?
Hovering
just out of reach,
make the other smile and laugh
and maybe, on special occasions, get flustered
but still not so close
ourinsecuritiesarebroughtintosharp detailand
we fail to pretend.
This is
a more comfortable Distance
for me.
I wonder if you did your part, too.
05/19/2007 Posted on 05/20/2007
Copyright © 2024 Anita Mac
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 05/20/07 at 03:59 AM Anita, I am blown away by this poem. The beginning reeled me in but "but still not so close ourinsecuritiesarebroughtintosharpdetailand we fail to pretend. This is a more comfortable Distance for me. I wonder if you did your part, too." ... but this, this was the kicker that made me go, "Wow, that's a so few words saying a whole lot." You've summed up feelings, provided imagery, given emotions to what could have turned out to be an emotionless poem and provided the reader with something to think about. Thanks for that.
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| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 06/01/07 at 01:36 AM i think i'd find myself right at home here... at this particular distance... |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 08/01/08 at 11:35 AM Congrats on POTD! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/01/08 at 03:09 PM Well done - a fine POTD! |
| Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 08/01/08 at 04:15 PM Congratulations on POTD! |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 08/01/08 at 08:29 PM the spacing and form works well. congrats on POTD |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/02/08 at 02:33 AM Anita, congratulations on POTD! Your one-sided conversation carries overtones of irony and walking away from a situation that the narrator acknowledges in the mind that it just won't work. Incredible! |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 08/02/08 at 03:52 AM for some reason coming back to this made me catch my breath... i'm not really sure how or why, but this feels weirdly familiar, not because i read it before... but because of some feeling i'm not sure how to describe... congratulations on potd, that's awesome! |
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