| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 02/16/07 at 03:46 PM If this is your first attempt, I would love to read your second! This is very excellent and you should be proud to have written it. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 02/16/07 at 06:30 PM Sandbagger! You said you can't write Haiku! Something tells me you are a closet writer! HA-HA!
Excellent!!! |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 02/18/07 at 11:16 AM with so few strokes of your haiku, you have captured gentility, and what more perfect accompaniment for gentility, than stars? |
| Posted by Ava Blu on 02/19/07 at 02:58 AM and what a lovely attempt! |
| Posted by Rhonda Maneki on 02/19/07 at 08:46 AM Very lovely...! I'm with Lori, I would never have guessed it was you first attempt either. * yeah* wonderful! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/19/07 at 03:39 PM LOL! Talk about haiku impact...I didn't expect that last line. Not bad for a first attempt; certainly easy to visualize. |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 02/19/07 at 07:07 PM lovely, takes us right there. Hope you stay with Haiku, it gets addictive. If you want any other ideas from me on this, or sites to check out etc.) let me know. Have you checked out our Tadpole Society on here too, Agnes is terrific. A sexy haiku indeed. |
| Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 02/20/07 at 02:49 PM I'm no expert, but for me a haiku is like a painting. If you see the image in the words then it's done the job. Thank you for showing me your painting :) |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 02/20/07 at 08:22 PM a delicious piece.. i agree with the above comments, you've created a beautiful painting! |
| Posted by Charles M Harrison on 12/26/07 at 01:53 AM Very good first attempt |
