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Me and You, What Went Wrong?
by Alisa Jshere they come again
thoughts of you,
I know I shouldn't let them linger
but linger they do,
they come to caress and massage my memories
ah! those sweet memories,
and I'm back to that chapter
that chapter of me and you
those nights we spent until daybreak,
time stepped aside
angels bowed low,
and nothing else mattered ...
we tasted that promise of love
glimpsed at that horizon there looming
strolled to the edge of forever,
at long last waiting for us
it was real,
I felt it and knew you did, too ...
did you ever wonder why we only got so close and no closer?
ever wonder exactly what went wrong?
it was me, I admit
I ran like a rabbit
ran like a gazelle
right into those demons, my own
insecurity and fear jumped out from the shadows
straight from my childhood, those abandonment issues
taunting me with both barrels loaded,
with their mocking tone they screamed
nobody wants you! nobody cares, remember?
you'll never be good enough for love or anything real ...
and I've never felt anything more real in my life
than what we both shared,
me and you ...
12/11/2006 Author's Note: How can any relationship have hope to continue in the present when one or both partners have unresolved issues from the past?
Posted on 12/11/2006
Copyright © 2024 Alisa Js
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/11/06 at 07:37 PM Personally, I really like the third stanza, as it stands out from the rest, and with some touching/tightening up could easily stand as the whole poem. |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 12/11/06 at 07:59 PM "but linger they do,
they come to caress and massage my memories
ah! those sweet memories,
and I'm back to that chapter
that chapter of me and you" ... this portion of your poem had great word play, emotion and imagery. The rest definitely displays the emotion and imagery with which you ran away from the relationship. "straight from my childhood, those abandonment issues
taunting me with both barrels loaded,
with their mocking tone they screamed
nobody wants you! nobody cares, remember?" ... super impact with these words, Alisa. This is a poem I could relate to greatly. Thanks for writing this piece. peace and love ...
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