Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Maureen Glaude on 12/03/06 at 11:52 PM such a heart-wrenching piece, we can all identify with for sure. When the surgeon works, we must pray for God's guidance over his hands. May all turn out fine. Beautiful writing, of a tough subject. |
Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 12/04/06 at 02:10 AM Poignant, written with deep compassion. Intense. Not naming the particular condition makes the poem fit universally. I sense a struggle with attempting to write with deep feeling without being maudlin. |
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/04/06 at 05:14 AM It seems like this one's a little more structured(sp)than usual. But that's cool, since, as far as I know, you're pretty adapt at just about any style. Great work, man. |
Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 12/04/06 at 05:24 AM Yes, very clear, especially with the line --that "you having quit the ritual countless breaths ago" and I completely feel with you and
"cannot mask my disappointment with the irony of life"-- it is just impossibly uncontrollable... -I wish we could, -that is what I have learned on the edge as you express here--and we do what we can=. You are brave. And with strong voice speak to the concentrated essence of human life and love. In poetry--your strongest cure--your most clear and powerful voice.
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Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 12/04/06 at 05:47 AM Of which
I will not say its name
nor quote its numbers
where there is and is not pity
as you fear but more
limitless inspiration
I love this stanza especially: "in how you rose above
the heartbreaks of youth
and for when the hour comes
far or near
in how you will face rebirth". This is strong stuff, Chris. Great write. |
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/04/06 at 06:15 PM I had to come back to this one. Your words are so carefully chosen for the pain you and a loved one have gone through/are going through. Quite wrenching and just so well written. |
Posted by Christel Crews on 12/04/06 at 08:08 PM such a lovely piece, that pulls at the heartstrings of all who have encountered this deep level of love.. i don't know what else to say, but you have left me breathless |
Posted by Katerina T Nix on 12/05/06 at 09:37 PM Striking words, Chris. Well done and great read. I really love those last three stanzas -Kat xo |
Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 12/06/06 at 05:51 PM Very strong work, Chris - lyrical and moving, without being too specific about the subject (though to me it sounds like a friend or loved one with lung cancer). Definitely one of your best! d:-) |
Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 12/06/06 at 05:52 PM P.S.: My only critique is the title - it seems a little weak for such a strong poem.... |
Posted by A. Paige White on 12/28/06 at 06:38 PM Wow. Somehow I overlooked this. If I could still speak, I'm sure I would only be repeating what all these others have said. Beautiful soul speak. Thanks. |