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Eighty Winks

by Leslie Ann Eisenberg

ItÂ’s 3:00 o'clock,
Time for the cave
My sonÂ’s bunk bed,
The lower, my rented space
For one hour

Dark down here, cozy respite
Thin mattress on wood slats.
The bed my dad built
Cradles me to dreamcalm

As does the musty boy smell
Of dirty socks, sweaty shirts,
Damp bathing suits, strange experiments
In Kirkland water bottles, calcified pebbles
from the American River in Strawberry,
The old carpet blanketed with old “Smokey’s” dog hair,
sand from the park, dust from muddy shoes

IÂ’m hypnotized by the sounds of fat mouse
Spinning on her wheel, cht, cht, cht, cht, cht
Sweet , brown “Furry,” who first peeked
Up at me from inside a paper bag,
Our accidental pet
He begged me not to feed to

The snake, “Sylvie,” shiny, slithering
Golden Goddess of muscle and circles
She brings me peace from an
odorless, soundless place,
Somehow, bewitched kin
Speaking to my deepest
Wish, to sleep off this big meal

08/16/2006

Author's Note: RIP, FURRY! You live in our hearts, always, and in our backyard, in the pet graveyard :( where Jordan and I visit you. We miss your squeaky breaths, the way you squinted your eyes when we petted you, and most of all, how cute you were after a bath, teeny tiny shivers with matted fur!! We love you, Fur Fur Fur!!!!! d My first memoir piece in a long time.…..We are all upside down, especially the dog! Room by room, our 22 year old carpet’s been ripped up, and this great gal has been refinishing the gorgeous, 50 year old red oak underneath…....this week, it’s the master bedroom. The bed, and all the other furniture, is in the living room, where my kids watch tv while I take my daily catnap with the little critters in the last room that is just NOT clean…I now find the carpet to be a disgusting, mold filled allergy hell, and I’ve never slept better since it’s been gone…but, in my son’s room, it doesn’t bother me when I’m ready for my cave time… the boy stuff. The animals. It’s all good…we’re even talking about getting a pair of box turtles.

Posted on 08/16/2006
Copyright © 2024 Leslie Ann Eisenberg

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 08/16/06 at 01:56 PM

...leslie, this is gracious...a serious entity of poetics is cathing that indescribable "moment" in detail and you did this extremely well in this lil' ditty, i was entranced being your kid, being you, being a 'janitor' as all us parent's are at some time and yet savoring the smells from our "cave"...lovely moment in time...peace, chaz

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 08/16/06 at 04:26 PM

really well crafted. i am actually surprised. not that i would expect anything else... actually, i didn't know what to expect. great snapshot.

Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 08/16/06 at 07:23 PM

A glimpse of the peace of normal life, written in such a way that makes one yearn for normalcy...

Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 08/17/06 at 12:23 AM

This is cosy stuff... took me back to the box bedroom I had as a kid... had to shake myself, the music took me by surprise :D

Posted by Christel Crews on 08/17/06 at 01:34 AM

such beautiful descriptions- you place the reader directly into the room, including not only the visual but the internal- beautiful!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/17/06 at 03:27 AM

Wonderful world of yours you've described. This takes me back to bunk bed days of my kids very clearly. There is nothing quite like a kid's room, full of all the treasures and sensory delights. I also really enjoyed your author's notes.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 08/17/06 at 03:33 AM

Hi Leslie. This is just superb poetry, IMHO! I love every work. A potd suggestion, to be sure. Excellent writing. Thanks.

Posted by Jared Fladeland on 08/18/06 at 05:12 AM

i can't wait to have kids

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 08/18/06 at 05:33 PM

Again, excellent. My potd suggestion, today.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/19/06 at 08:28 PM

A slice of homey life that just made me feel good. I love the little images in each stanza - the memories mixed with each aspect of life. Taken together they make up something unforgettable.
~Chelle~

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/21/06 at 04:34 PM

The Cave...I like that. It's neat how families use pet names for things that go on in their households. Thanks for the colorful glimpse Leslie into your personal space. :o)

Posted by Joe Cramer on 10/07/06 at 11:54 AM

Wonderfully written.... thanks for sharing!

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