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Birth in 5-7-5

by Kristina Woodhill

Ballerina bud
Unfurled pirouetting birth
Seeks the warm spotlight

05/03/2006

Posted on 05/04/2006
Copyright © 2024 Kristina Woodhill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 05/04/06 at 02:11 PM

I love this as a resumé from a garden nursery.
I want to adopt this bud and settle its loveliness right on the lattice of my porch where the sun peeks through searching for a prism-maker! U R a dancer with lightlovely shoes! :)

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 05/06/06 at 03:06 PM

Yes, it is pictorial and so alive despite the restricted space. It does find a spotlight.

Posted by Rula Shin on 05/07/06 at 08:29 PM

What a vivid scene, painted with a living brushstroke, Life's first moment unfolding before our very eyes. A beautiful metaphor you have here.

Posted by Joan Serratelli on 05/08/06 at 12:43 AM

With so few words, you have described so much life. I can really see the birth of the "ballerina bud". Beautiful piece! you have done a great job!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/08/06 at 12:05 PM

Worthy combination of human and flora, with definite haiku impact.

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