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by JD Clay

I painted you today
Alfresco lush with
Emerald eyes and flaxen hair
Your sophic smile a
Mockery of time

I painted you
A Seraphim
Prancing on the courtyard mist
Your vaguery
A stroke of Byzantine

Appliqué corporeal
Amethyst topaz and pearl
Diamond skies
The crowning shade I
Painted you today



Posted on 02/17/2006
Copyright © 2021 JD Clay

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Rusty C Arquette on 02/17/06 at 10:17 PM

Lush, imagery laden, and romantic...that's poetry brother! - I know it's truly romantic when Maria floats in on gossamar wings to leave a note... Well done - RCat the Softy

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 02/18/06 at 01:01 AM

Wonderful sense of timelessness, and prevading beauty. Excellent poetics, jadi.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 02/19/06 at 01:39 AM

Well, after Maria's comments what can one say but Amen! Abounds in exquisite similes!

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 02/19/06 at 06:38 AM

My pick for poem of the day Jadi. A word painting classic for the ages....Charlie

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/19/06 at 02:12 PM

A superb and worthy addition to the genre of paint/poetry. You've mixed your colors and words well with this one jadi.

Posted by Ulyss Rubey on 02/19/06 at 07:11 PM

Chris nailed it. Remarkable clarity- images of Taos and Georgia O'Keeffe

Posted by Kate Demeree on 02/21/06 at 01:44 PM

WOW... JD I liked this soooo well I suggested it for potd! Beautiful! It amazes me!

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 02/25/06 at 04:53 AM

I got to thinking Jadi: I wonder if the brushes tickled.....Charlie

Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 04/28/06 at 02:15 AM

I want to see this portrait. Wait, I did see it when I read this poem. Someone called it lush...that's the right word for this piece.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 05/10/06 at 11:38 PM

lush, indeed. the brush strokes of your pen create a whole world with the adoration of woman. sophic smile and vagary give such depth to the heart of the character, while Emerald eyes and flaxen hair paint a portrait of beauty! a deserving choice for POTD. going in favorites.

Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 05/19/06 at 08:42 PM

I came looking for poetry to heal the soul and found your library again...you paint, you write, you leave a whisper on the heart..beautiful.

Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 06/02/06 at 04:44 PM

Makes me want to pick up a brush!

Posted by David R Spellman on 06/18/06 at 08:53 PM

Indeed a beautiful portrait. Loved it all but the lines "Your sophic smile a/Mockery of time" really tickled my fancy...

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 07/24/06 at 11:14 PM

A painting in the color of love.This goes beyond beautiful all the way to downright romantic. Congratulations on POTD jadi. peace to you.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 07/24/06 at 11:19 PM

congrats on POTD. a beautiful choice. PK

Posted by Thomas K. Hunt on 07/25/06 at 03:54 AM

you are an artist

Posted by Glenn Currier on 08/27/06 at 03:51 PM

I love what Sandy said: "I came looking for poetry to heal the soul and found your library again...you paint, you write, you leave a whisper on the heart..beautiful." I would add... I came looking for jadi today and found this woman lying here all luxuriant and as temporal as the senses.

Posted by Alisa Js on 12/18/06 at 10:12 PM

this one speaks to me of longing for that one.. that special one... and missing that time together.. beautiful..;-0

Posted by Bethany Lee on 02/23/07 at 02:57 PM

I can feel the brushstrokes...lovely!

Posted by Christopher J Davidson on 09/02/07 at 02:51 AM

A painting on canvas, a painting of words, perfectly mixed to create imagery and flow that took my breath away. Fantastic stuff!

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 09/02/07 at 06:31 PM

Exquisite ... the title suggests a reading of the first line alternative interpretation: as the "you" here IS (transforms, becomes) "today" by virtue of this painting and by the ower poetic love that wandlike, with words, makes this happen. The concluding "shade I" rings of identity ("jadi") who accomplishes this transformation, and places the "crown..." by "painted" power. Beautifully evocative of Byzantine painting the colors, precious stones, the architectural symmetry of the poem and wording universalizes this intimate portrait.

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