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Green Zone III

by Kristina Woodhill

Oz-like, you exist
Surreal world in desert storm
Who controls the Wind?

01/11/2006

Posted on 01/12/2006
Copyright © 2021 Kristina Woodhill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 01/12/06 at 02:14 PM

This might be considered a senryu (?). Vivid imagery, catches the imagination!

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 01/13/06 at 05:16 AM

I love the whole series....nice work.!

Posted by Mara Meade on 01/16/06 at 04:51 PM

Indeed, who controls the Wind? Very thought provoking.

Posted by Jim Benz on 04/15/06 at 04:17 PM

to my taste, this is the best one in the folder. it releases an enormous amount of imagery in just a few words. the question at the end, to my mind, is very wry and applicable. it also cements a verbal rhythm to the whole piece which I think is essential in a short form like this. One thing that's often forgotten in western haiku is that the japanese versions are built around a cadence native to the language, and essential to the form. our own language is so different, but I think we can find great cadences for our own haiku to mirror that intent - and you've done so beautifully here.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 07/09/06 at 03:10 PM

I like how this juxtaposes man and God, with neither seeming in full control.

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