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you're not the only one
by Elizabeth Jillyou're not the only one
whom this has happened to;
things like contempt and spite
ne'er come out of the blue.
a poison snake that's shed its skin
just grows another one,
and it will bite again.
if I were you, 'twould lock my door
and keep my toes up off the floor;
I'd lock my thoughts inside a book
and never take another look.
you're not the only one
who weeps alone;
there're more of us,
and we have formed a stone.
one day we'll lift it
up out of the blue
and fling it at the wolf,
like shepherds do.
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12/04/2005 Posted on 12/04/2005
Copyright © 2024 Elizabeth Jill
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 01/31/06 at 09:41 PM Ack, you found my nutshell again! "a poison snake that's shed its skin
just grows another one,
and it will bite again." ... yes, that's it exactly. You have written this so well, from a child's point of view, but in an adult world. I get it, it like it, and I have, flung "it at the wolf,
like shepherds do." Super poem!
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| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 04/07/06 at 11:28 PM I don't know how I missed this gem "a poison snake that's shed its skin just grows another one, and it will bite again." Loved that line. It says so much. Excellent read! |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 04/21/06 at 02:31 PM Always with poetic meaning Elizabeth, I especially enjoyed that last stanza, particularly the last four lines. This gives one the feeling of comfort in affinity with others. This is the attitude one should take, the snake will always bite, but your LIFE will never be at stake if you SEE the snake for what it is, because then you know how to neutralize the effect of its venom.
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| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 04/21/06 at 02:33 PM Affinity is what matters and matters being aware of snakes and wolves. Awareness is a weapon which will keep the snakes and wolves at bay. |
| Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 04/22/06 at 02:27 AM well I just love this...you have a way of bringing the reader into a different light. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 10/06/06 at 11:31 AM Immaculate - but can I say...'Out of the blue', resplendent in connotation, would be a worthy, éhcilc-gnirut title? |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/11/07 at 04:05 AM Wonderful! This poem speaks so well of the problems that are common to all of us. Misery may love company, but when someone is in it, there's a gulf a mile wide around us. Very compassionate, Jill.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 07/01/07 at 10:17 AM the muse would say to sheperd, hey shep, you're not the only one savors meat and as much as you like to put your hooks in the lamb yourself, a wolf has got to eat too! or does a wolf err in saying so? no? so why toss stones? Jill this poem is wonderfully musical and alive in the valley of my chin and in the balls of my feet. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 07/25/07 at 02:13 AM That last verse... |
| Posted by JD Clay on 08/21/08 at 07:20 PM Your use of symbolism is everything poetic, Jill. And here I though the proverbial closet was bare. |
| Posted by Mo Couts on 06/23/11 at 01:54 AM The first verse did me in; awesome write, Elizabeth! |
| Posted by Lori Blair on 10/12/11 at 12:18 AM So Very Strong Words...good heavens..I have missed your work..Excellent!!! |
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