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Welcoming the Dawn

by Ashok Sharda

Soft and smeared with yellow hue
It was the Dawn
Who approached me
When I refused to budge
From my seat

Walked in a thought, stealthily
Threatening my presence
What do I do now
As it targets my very Being
While I keep on occupying my seat?

The Nagual spoke wordless from within
“Just BE, stuck to your seat
If you have the choice to receive
You have the power to dismiss”

Eyes smiling, I watched
As the thought took an about turn
Walking back into oblivion
When I refused to yield

I Welcomed the Dawn

11/17/2005

Posted on 11/17/2005
Copyright © 2021 Ashok Sharda

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 11/17/05 at 05:08 AM

Askok, yes, the natural path is knowingness first, then knowledge...the full power of - intent. Bringing the unstructured self to the tonal or structured. Very well penned, indeed.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 11/19/05 at 01:57 AM

From a Christian perspective, this poem says stand your ground when temptation comes around!

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 11/21/05 at 06:39 AM

A wonderfully positive message, Ashok. Nice work :)

Posted by Laura Doom on 11/21/05 at 07:24 PM

The 'power to dismiss', as facilitating, in addition to being 'validated' by, the 'choice to receive', choice being a meaningless concept where there is only one (no) choice :). The poetry in this piece given 'life' by the personalisation of 'Dawn', bearing metaphors...

Posted by Max Bouillet on 12/08/05 at 03:53 AM

This is an amazing verse filled with color and meshing that color with nature and our being. As usual, you make me think and by thinking I am made better. Great read.

Posted by Laura Doom on 04/14/07 at 12:29 PM

Although I have been here before, your words have taken on a different hue this time around - a natural turn, and one by which I do not feel in any way threatened :) The refusal to yield, a step towards retreat from an unnatural condition - the contrast encapsulated in the first stanza broke upon me anew. Poetry becomes you Ashok :)

Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 04/14/07 at 02:23 PM

“Just BE, stuck to your seat If you have the choice to receive You have the power to dismiss” ... great words, indeed, which led up to a beautiful ending. Congratulations on your POTD.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 04/15/07 at 03:31 AM

Ashok, congratulations on your POTD! The dawn is persistent if nothing else.
~Chelle~

Posted by Glenn Currier on 06/10/10 at 10:09 PM

Ah, what a lovely piece. You had my imagination totally captured throughout. I love the Dawn imagery. Staying put and present in the now is both a challenge and a gift for me. I love reading your poems because it gives me a chance to walk gently across the oceans and continents and linger a while in your wonderful land with a people so soaked with wisdom. Thanks, Ashok.

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