| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 07/21/05 at 12:18 PM I really like how the storm outside parallels the sense of past storms in relationship. There's so much symbolism and anticipation, patient progress, recognition of baby step results, then surprise bigger steps. I really like it. Shows how the rebuilding takes place between father and son. My brother was so into Star Trek the other day on his newly acquired tv at the hospital, but whenever he did break away to communicate or respond to my conversation, (I kept minimal as he was enjoying his show) it went well. Baby steps. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 07/24/05 at 01:17 PM Your usual insightful expression of familial relationship. Indeed, symbolism, emotion and hope radiate from this tome. |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 07/25/05 at 03:40 AM I like the interplay of the human interaction and the interaction with electronic media and how the two blend into what dare to call real life. What is especially interesting to me is that you do not demonize the media but humanize it. The way I read it is that you suggest media can play a part in piecing together the interactions that make a relationship. Another thing I like is all the detail. Finally, I noticed that you had no punctuation and yet the poem flowed and held its meaning quite well. I think I can learn from you on that score. Good work, my friend. |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 07/28/05 at 06:47 AM this is very cool, Chris. An insightful analysis of society and culture with touching personal insights. Nice writing, Chris :) |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 07/28/05 at 08:35 PM this one touches really close to home. it's funny how little things can distract us so and how even when we're so close we can be so distant from each other. great read! |
| Posted by Uriel Tovar on 07/30/05 at 12:48 AM you know dark city is on the vatican's top playing list because of the search for the soul. excellent poem (comment has nothing to do with the introductory side note) good job |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 07/31/05 at 04:22 AM Wonderful tale Chris....Charlie |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 07/31/05 at 01:27 PM This could be viewed on many levels - the whole of societal and familial trends and the isolation and almost anti-social side of much of our modern technology. But, as a story of simple bonding between parent and child it becomes a heart-warming and hopeful bit of writing. Cudos to you for the experience of it and for its re-telling here! |
| Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 08/01/05 at 03:15 AM Very personal depiction of a bonding (or re-bonding, if you will) process, and how it can be both hampered and aided by technology. I too like the parallel "storms" stanza, both as an image and metaphor.... d:-) |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 08/03/05 at 02:07 AM Wow, this keeps hitting # 1 again, as it well should. |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 08/04/05 at 07:40 AM A great POTD & no 1, Chris. Congratulations :) |
| Posted by Michael Faraday on 08/04/05 at 11:11 AM enjoyed this slic of life, chris. well done. :) |
| Posted by JD Clay on 08/05/05 at 04:23 AM I'd trade Buk's demons for the death and destruction of the Internet's dark side any day of the week, but four Wednesday nights a month with my son would definitely be a great trade off. I guess we shouldn't complain too much, they probably see pathetic and/or poetry in the same light, haha. Congratulations on becoming The Offsprung Poet Of The Day. I love the overall dynamic of this piece, Chris, good energy.
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| Posted by Stephanie Myers on 08/05/05 at 04:31 AM Congrats on POTD!!! |
