|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 06/07/05 at 08:01 PM|
Two lines, Bradd, which sum things up so well.
|Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 06/07/05 at 08:02 PM|
Oops, I forgot to say I think it might read better if broken up into three lines though. :)
|Posted by Paul Marino on 06/07/05 at 10:26 PM|
|Posted by Kimberly Bare on 06/09/05 at 03:51 PM|
so much said with so few words! Great...
|Posted by Ava Blu on 06/10/05 at 03:20 AM|
haha That it does!
|Posted by Ashok Sharda on 06/10/05 at 05:38 PM|
Yes, so far the two are lovers and not love.I agree in toto.
|Posted by Melanie J Yarbrough on 06/21/05 at 02:56 AM|
I could never pinpoint the problems with love- and there it is
|Posted by Paganini Jones on 12/23/05 at 10:39 AM|
Re Kyles comment, you could also make it a single liner - something more commonly seen in japanese haiku. After all the breaks are very clear without actually having line breaks.
I like this poem. It WORKS.
|Posted by Kristi Paik on 12/01/06 at 09:16 PM|
HAHAHA thats the best 2 lines i think i have ever read....kudos!
|Posted by Cristy M. on 12/12/06 at 11:34 PM|