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Attack

by Bruce W Niedt


That pain across the chest
was the warning shot, fired across my bow:
reverse your course, or prepare to be boarded.

Pirates in the bloodstream
threaten to cut off the trade routes
and lay siege to my capital.

Now in sick bay,
I can assess the damage,
get my vessel seaworthy again.

But itÂ’s time to rethink
what I barter with my body
before the whole empire collapses.

05/22/2005

Author's Note: Yes, it's autobiographical....

Posted on 05/22/2005
Copyright © 2024 Bruce W Niedt

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kristine Briese on 05/23/05 at 02:38 AM

This is excellent - so consistent in its theme, and I love the imagery. "Pirates in the bloodstream"...outstanding!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/23/05 at 03:09 PM

I didn't find it ambiguous at all. The message, analogy perfectly clear...heart attack.

Posted by Glenn Currier on 07/03/05 at 05:42 AM

Your brilliant poem is potent to one who has had one or two shots across his bow also. Your poem awakens me to the danger of imminent take-over of the vessel. Now all I have to do is captain the rudder and mainsail into safer seas. Wonderful metaphor! Thanks for sharing and for the needed message.

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