| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 11/23/04 at 04:24 AM Colorful poem Rula....Charlie |
| Posted by Mahassine Mir on 11/23/04 at 09:54 AM I love the last stanza very much.
For nothing is more beautiful
Nor anything as pleasing to my senses
Than the boundless texture of your colors
As a child, I have never been able to color within the line...Guess things have not changed now...
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| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 11/23/04 at 02:31 PM that is so beautifully written...the last stanza, so moving...well done |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 11/23/04 at 02:42 PM I have this special feeling in my heart for poets who fear not their colors will bleed, will exceed the boundaries and you dear Rula are one. |
| Posted by Richard Vince on 11/23/04 at 05:17 PM beautiful stuff. especially 'what is a distance traveled without a companion / but a subjective truth that never leaves its grave?' and the bit after it. it almost makes being a secret sound appealing. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 11/23/04 at 06:14 PM Pretty good poem from strong, original lines throughout this Rula. Romance, both dark and colorful. |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 11/23/04 at 07:32 PM the pacing and images are great, but i must agree with gabriel that the voice is what makes the piece, and it STAYS strong in every verse, which is a testament to your growth as an artist.
"i've come back now to tell you
that I’m tired of these pits
though aware that darkness
leads to light
mines are so deep when
holding priceless treasures
but no happiness awaits me there
for what is a distance traveled without a companion
but a subjective truth that never leaves its grave?"...so much is said in these two stanzas, and perhaps it could be a little tighter, but as is, it is very moving, and so is the end, to compare the bloom of lovers/friends to the joy of coloring the page. |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/01/04 at 04:59 AM Rula, I'm just mesmerized by the words of your poem. My favorite line - "color me from without, color me from within," because it reminds me of the Chicago song, "Color My World." I've put it on my favorites list. How romantic! |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 12/04/04 at 09:18 PM 
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| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 12/12/04 at 11:38 PM ‘color me from without, color me from within…… these lines emit beautiful vibrations of their own in the wake of these lines-‘why not BE our very own secret to share and treasure'. You seem to have found the path and a fellow traveler on this very evolutionary path. What you seem to be seeking is what you seem to be transmitting. Yes, those refined and positive impressions which imbue the fellow travelers with this drive making this journey beautiful. Well, this is what I saw and based my drawing on.All the best. |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 04/11/06 at 05:37 PM With every poem read of yours, the more mesmerized I become. You truely are an artist. The painting are painted with words. This piece is very beautiful. You are truly amazing! |
