Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Traci Mabats on 10/03/04 at 07:03 PM This has a great rhythm, it slides nicely along. |
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 10/03/04 at 10:11 PM I'm not sure what this is truly about, but application to my life at the moment seems absolutely appropriate (so I hope you don't mind if I linger in the idea of it, swirl it on my tongue a time or two so that the real power of it manifests in my heart and life). You are amazing, Rula! |
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 10/05/04 at 01:25 AM YEOWZA! Paints a very dark picture, utterly brilliant in its sarcasm. Reminds me of a passage in the Bible maybe or I read somewhere about men who wrap themselves in great deeds. |
Posted by Max Bouillet on 10/06/04 at 03:59 AM Great language and technique. The impact is dark and scathing and the aftermath is quite hopeless. Wow. An eye-opening piece that drives the nail of pessimism into the already cynical heart. Great read. |
Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/06/04 at 11:14 AM well thought, well penned, well everything. |
Posted by Sarah Graves on 10/07/04 at 12:53 AM You really create a clear picture here for the reader. Very effective, in style and wording. Great read. |
Posted by JD Clay on 10/08/04 at 01:44 PM Gratuitous poetry, Rula. This is an intricately textured endowment that equally scratches the surface and codifies the soul. Likewise, your symbolism is both, the proverbial penny in a cup and trumpet in the vail.
Pe4ce... |
Posted by Ginette T Belle on 10/08/04 at 04:01 PM max's comment mirrors my own...i thought this was such a great read and flows together very nicely.. |
Posted by Ashok Sharda on 10/10/04 at 04:21 PM 
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Posted by Ashok Sharda on 10/10/04 at 04:32 PM
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