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A View from the Fag-End
by Ashok Sharda
It's an endless path
narrowed down by counters,
shops, and the known
One has to manipulate his
way through these hurdles
and umpteen more
There's a big queue behind you,
there's a big queue preceeding you
The path seemed ascending
when I commenced my journey,
the path seems descending
when I have come to
the fag end of my being
09/14/2004 Posted on 09/14/2004
Copyright © 2024 Ashok Sharda
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 09/15/04 at 02:01 AM Ashok, good to see another one from you and one I like. The last stanza is powerful - a unique way to think about life and death. Great Work! |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 09/15/04 at 11:50 AM usually that is how it works, you light the fag, which is your life, take the necessary drags and flick or watch the ash fall, or don't light the fag at all, saving it perhaps for another day or come that day and it be too windy and you can't light up your life because the match keeps going out. Thought provoking, Ashok. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/16/04 at 01:25 AM Yes, thought provoking as usual! While descending life can still be challenging and exciting! Hope that Fag-end doesn't mean there are only ashes left! |
| Posted by Mike Loftis on 09/16/04 at 01:38 AM As per you norm a solid performance Ashok. |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 09/16/04 at 02:13 AM Life is but a que - waiting to live, waiting to die and move on to the next step. Well put as per your usual. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 09/16/04 at 11:24 PM For non-smokers, that would be the bare knuckle of life? A perspective on perspective, a parallel with something Susan Kasten posted recently. I like the use of 'counters', more an indictment than a mere shop fitting - so I guess there are layers of implication in the 'shops' reference...also the inverse relationship between the journey through a queue and that of 'life' - though I guess it depends on the nature of what lies at the conclusion - the end of a queue is merely indulgent or anticlimactic? :>
[problems with reconnection *déjà voodoo chills*] |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 09/16/04 at 11:27 PM 'Puzzle' |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/17/04 at 01:21 PM Hmmm...I would prefer to view life from the filter end myself. Liable to burn my lips the other way haha. Thought provoking cigarette break Ashok. Fag...now there's a word we don't here too often any more, at least here in Canada. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 09/19/04 at 04:33 AM "Ashes to ashes" Well done Ashok.....Charlie |
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