Sour Grapes or Grapes Deferred

by Kara Hayostek

What happens to those grapes in the fridge?

Do they shrivel up
like a sweater from Wal-mart?

Or flourish as bacteria
in the bowels of the crisper drawer?
Do they stink like rotten fruit?
Or smell of sweet and tangy wine
or grape flavored blow pops?

Maybe the meatloaf eats them
in a display of alpha meatloaf dominance

Afterall, it was there first.


Author's Note: I wrote this for creative writing. The assignment was to pick a poem from our booklet and model a new poem after it. I chose "Dream Deferred" by Langston Hughes.

Posted on 07/28/2004
Copyright © 2021 Kara Hayostek

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charles E Minshall on 07/28/04 at 03:51 AM

Fun poem Kara. From the grapes of wrap?...Charlie

Posted by Rula Shin on 07/28/04 at 04:23 PM

Oh I love this one Kara! How very amusing and clever! You know that meatloaf is a tough neighbor to have for he is always beating up all the 'softies' on the block...I also love you're reference of the meantloaf as 'Alpha dominant' hahha NICE...really really well done SIL :-)

Posted by Max Bouillet on 07/28/04 at 09:11 PM

Funny. I hope they go the wine route, but the meatloaf (or it might have been ham) probably did the alpha male dominance thing. Beefy males often eat up things just to prove they can.

Posted by Ginette T Belle on 07/28/04 at 11:41 PM

i love the humour in this...especially the line "like a sweater from Wal-Mart"...well said

Posted by Matthew Zangen on 07/29/04 at 01:41 AM

alpha meatloaf :] excellent.

Posted by Amanda Bullington on 07/29/04 at 01:44 AM

I think this is the first poem I've seen that's witty and meaningful all in one. I love the last line, "Afterall, it was there first." Funny. Great job.

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 07/29/04 at 12:42 PM

not to mention how lonely and trembling they must be in such a frigid environ, and as you say, fearful of the meatloaf and they waiting rescue, waiting for poet to ope the latch and warm and burst each 'tween palate and roof. this is wonderfully creative Kara and in choosing Langston Hughes you made a wise choice.

Posted by Traci Mabats on 07/29/04 at 07:43 PM

Holy Cr*p this is hilarious! Of course the meatloaf was there first, it's been there forever (since the begining) donchya know.

Posted by Laura Doom on 07/29/04 at 11:06 PM

I'm partial to grapes, so from experience I'd expand on the bowel issue. Now I have a compulsion to consume the Langston Hughes piece...

Posted by Laura Doom on 07/29/04 at 11:17 PM

Brilliant - & yes, I've consumed the original, and I love the way this both complements and parodies it. I'm also relieved you chose not to condemn your delicious fruit to a distressingly explosive demise...

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 10/28/05 at 04:53 PM

This is pretty good...certainly entertaining. Kudos!

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 09/10/06 at 04:31 AM

Congratulations on POTD Kara. At least they didn't explode! ;-)

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