|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Paganini Jones on 05/26/04 at 10:12 PM|
Glad it wasn't nettles!
(A possible suggestion - could you make the last line be in the first rather than the third person to make it more 3 dimentional?)
|Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/27/04 at 12:19 AM|
I like the double meaning of tickled here. You've really come to excell these past few years in your haiku, and I like the last line the way it is. PS: Thanks for your detailed comment on On Humans...; great minds think alike don't they? :o)
|Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/27/04 at 12:20 AM|
PS: michaelmas...a new word or species for me; must look it up.
|Posted by Agnes Eva on 05/27/04 at 04:33 PM|
ahh, that third line adds a giggle to the scene
|Posted by Don Matley on 05/21/08 at 09:23 PM|
SISTER YOU NEVER CEASE TO AMAZE ME WITH YOUR WORK. I LOVE THE MICHAELMAS DAISIES AND THE SIMPLICITY OF THE CONTACT. THE LAST LINE MAKES THE POEM BECAUSE OF THE SIMPLE EFFECT OF THE MATTER OF FACT OBSERVATION IN THE FIRST LINES. KEEP IT UP KID AND SEND ANY NEW WORK TO ME AND I WILL GIVE YOU FULL CREDIT AND BILLING!!!!!