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Wrought Irony

by JD Clay

 
Awkward stanzas propagate
The passive and prolific mind
Piquant phrases left to seek
Asylum in a pseudonym
Somebody call the cops
 
Rhyme and reason bound and gagged
Grandeur dragged from off the page 
Labored lines and tailored text
Hostage to an errant thought
Look out he's got a knife
 
Hyperbole and anecdote
Accomplice to a massacre
Of plagiarizing metaphors
And rhetoric in muddy shoes 
Without an alibi
 
Exacerbated author's note
Pushing past the caution tape
To chronicle a cliched scene
Of butchery with poisoned pen and
Chalk outline of a poem
 
~jadi

 

 

 

04/03/2004

Posted on 05/05/2004
Copyright © 2019 JD Clay

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Ulyss Rubey on 05/05/04 at 02:36 AM

I think it's great, but what do I know?

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 05/05/04 at 03:41 AM

At last your muse returned. Pretty neat poem ....Charlie

Posted by Amy Niggel on 05/05/04 at 03:57 AM

Heh this was a great read, truly enjoyable!

Posted by Sarah Graves on 05/05/04 at 04:24 PM

Lol, nice peice JD. :)

Posted by David R Spellman on 05/05/04 at 09:48 PM

Loved all the wordplay in this, including the title. Great work JD!

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/06/04 at 01:51 AM

A humorous and thought provoking view of wordsmanship, especially of the poetic kind. I think a bit of tongue-in-cheek satire on poetic pretentions as well.

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 05/06/04 at 03:16 AM

truth be told... truth be told... blessings *grin*

Posted by Ginette T Belle on 05/06/04 at 03:33 AM

i stand in awe before you...once again...it's perfect

Posted by Kate Demeree on 05/07/04 at 01:39 AM

Well... JD.. this blew me away totally, I don't even know how to comment it. Except to say it is excillent! You pack a whole lot into one poem my friend!

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 05/08/04 at 02:56 AM

well, its not only 'Wrought Irony', a architect and a construction engineer too is playing their role. hahaha And how about the observer, SEEING seeing?

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 05/08/04 at 06:45 PM

And here I was thinking all the grammar and punctuation Nazi's had escaped Berlin and were living on a beach in South America! Did someone mention satire earlier? Nah...never! heheh...funny stuff! ;P

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/08/04 at 06:54 PM

The best poem on the subject of plagiarism I've ever read. Kudos!

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 05/09/04 at 11:28 AM

this poem describes much of what is taking place in the fore and much of the irony that is missed in the aft. somebody call the publisher, jadi's got a winner.

Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 05/11/04 at 01:52 PM

What a great metaphor - we all know the feeling! It is a crime indeed what we all write from time to time and try to foist on others as "poetry" - no one is immune.... d:-)

Posted by Max Bouillet on 05/20/04 at 10:17 PM

Great use of literary styles to poke jest at literary styles! What's a meta for anyway? :)

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 05/22/04 at 06:43 PM

Excellent poem of the day Jadi. Congatulations...Charlie

Posted by David R Spellman on 05/22/04 at 08:11 PM

Great choice for POTD... Congrats JD!

Posted by Patricia J Reed on 06/25/04 at 05:07 AM

i love this one!!- the crime scene scenario is great! patti

Posted by Vimal Rony on 07/27/04 at 12:14 AM

I don't know what to say.I am just flabbergasted by the way you have delivered this.

Posted by Kara Hayostek on 08/01/04 at 05:57 AM

Clever as always JD...

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 07/08/05 at 06:02 AM

WOW! I'm speechless (or as much as I can be for an Italian), which may be a good thing, because they might read me my rights. Glad I clicked on this, since it shows me word twists in a different light, and a wish that I could write like this.
~Chelle~

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 05/23/06 at 01:28 PM

sweeping sweeping sweeping away the laws!
what did I expect? (found this in the favorites list) You always blow me away! —swelp me!
I pronounce you guilty of being too excellent.

Posted by P.T. Brooks on 12/15/06 at 08:30 PM

a write well worth reading, well done jd

Posted by Alisa Js on 12/18/06 at 10:10 PM

To me this one speaks of the trials and tribulations that poets do go through when trying to convey that message, with or without their muse... clever, indeed..;-)

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/14/07 at 02:56 PM

Read this again with great pleasure. The humor with a touch of pathos is so JDish! Hey, that could be a new poetic term a JDism! LOL!!

Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 06/05/07 at 08:45 PM

Had to sign back in just to comment on these lines of crime. This is sharp, very sharp!

Posted by Ashley Lane on 07/03/07 at 04:27 AM

You had me with "asylum in a pseudonym." I love the whimsy and wit.

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 10/28/07 at 05:36 AM

Crystal-cut these five sided stanzas are truly "wrought" --worked delectably and presented as if on a silver (not iron) platter. Interesting that "wrought iron"... is easily shaped, while the irony of it is--that this poem is what is left after the master metalsmith has worked it so well. Yes, here I see the irony in it. "Look out he's got a knife"-- the craftsman poet with his passion for excellence is gouging out all the mentioned weaknesses and "awkward"nesses to produce this gem. That is editing at its finest, wrought upon itself to produce literary work worthy of its devices.

Posted by Bethany Lee on 05/16/08 at 01:55 PM

"Labored lines and tailored text"...your alliteration in this piece was fabulous! THIS is why I love poetry, and this is the kind of piece that makes my toes curl under and softens my insides until I'm willing to do anything you say as long as words like that keep... coming...bravo!

Posted by Julie Adams on 07/14/08 at 03:52 PM

Somebody call the cops is right, this piece is HOT!!! You are my modern day Poe, I swear, u have every inch of his wit and talent...I wish I could IV your poetry straight to my head when you post :D ...every line a tight rope of balance and skill...a favorite, as they all seem to be...peace, jewels

Posted by V. Blake on 02/27/10 at 05:28 AM

No wonder this is on everyone's favorites list. Now it's on mine too.

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