| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 04/17/04 at 11:32 PM ooooo...good one David! So vibrant in a monochomatic sort of way! You set the tone perfectly in this piece. |
| Posted by Gabrielle L Gervais on 04/18/04 at 03:47 PM wow, the form is great and the meaning even more so- glad to see something new :) |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 04/19/04 at 03:29 AM Well done Dave, well done....Charlie |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 04/19/04 at 11:45 AM Powerful message in this excellently written poem. It is particular meaningful to me because a friend of mine has been making his "home" more or less with the "homeless" the last several months. He has introduced me to a side of life I have not seen. It is so very, very sad! Richard has been somewhat of a gadfly to the "city fathers" in attempting to get more assistance in the way of shelter and means of hygiene for these homeless folk. |
| Posted by Anne Howe on 04/19/04 at 12:48 PM 21st century poetry at its best both in style and subject |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 04/19/04 at 06:18 PM You may not post a lot of poems, but when you do, they're humdingers! Powerful capture Dave. |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 04/19/04 at 10:42 PM Amazing writing Dave. You've captured a city's story with insight and eloquence that danced along like a song of protest from the 60's. Well done Sir! |
| Posted by JD Clay on 04/21/04 at 02:29 AM This is a well-turned, street wise depiction of urban bohemia in graphic detail, Dave. Just reading it kinda makes you want to take a bath. Good stuff!
Pe4ce... |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 04/21/04 at 02:49 AM Much tragedy in the urbs, and you capture it artfully. The rhyme somehow makes the reading of the pain a little easier, like taking some water with the strong medicine. Great poem Dave, it was obviously a work of love and took some time. It is gratifying to read such a carefully wrought cration. |
| Posted by Mike Loftis on 09/01/04 at 02:53 AM This is a brilliantly written piece. Standing O |
| Posted by Kris Mara on 06/01/09 at 03:42 PM you paint it well...the flow is so great in this...it's intelligent rhyming (I think I say that too much, but it's the best way I can think to describe it)...and clever word usage... |
