| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kara Hayostek on 03/21/04 at 10:04 PM It was a pleasure to read your latest, very sad portrait of human nature. The last stanza is beautiful. |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 03/22/04 at 02:57 AM very powerful. Great to see your work again, Vimal. This reminded me of the King Solomon story in the bible, and the two women who were fighting for the same baby, and were told the only fair way to share the baby was to rip him in half (and of course the lesson was the real mother wouldn't bear for that to be done). Fine poem. |
| Posted by Stephanie Kent on 03/22/04 at 04:33 AM It's wonderful to see you posting again. This is very emotionally raw, and different from your older style, but still good:) "Gradually you drew blinds
over your inner eyes and
built fences around
your heart and land.
Well our heart and our land."
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| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/23/04 at 07:13 PM Worthy effort, expression and interesting way of looking at the history of our species as explained in that last line. Kudos Vimal. |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 03/23/04 at 08:12 PM I see this as a unique expression of a sad perspective on how humans attempt to detach themselves from 'the creator'. The first 'blind' man, was he born blind? Or did he blind himself the day he put up that fence around his 'heart'? And his reasoning 'excuse'? The Creator is one who "suits [our] thinking." Yes, this reasoning trait that we have been 'blessed' with makes it more difficult to BELIEVE without seeing...to have faith (at least that's what I thought you meant). I also think it's interesting how you reference HIM as "the impartial one" and yet still He has human qualities in the poem, "He weeps up above". I'm not sure how consistant this part is (for me), but the poem made me think much on the subject. Great write Vimal, I really enjoyed it! :-)
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| Posted by John Ilotan on 03/25/04 at 05:00 PM Great work Vimal. I like how you express the idea that we are all multiples of one heart. You've given me something to think about. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 04/09/04 at 04:03 AM Excellent poem Vimal......Charlie |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 04/16/04 at 12:09 PM so true and so pure of heart, Vimal. |
| Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 04/16/04 at 03:45 PM Quite powerful indeed |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 12/25/04 at 05:32 PM Quite a fascinating concept interestingly related! |
