| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/04/04 at 02:11 AM Hi Amber. This is an excellent piece, and so powerfully subtle, it's scary. It sounds like that you're trapped in a relationship, but have somehow through chance or perhaps stronger, fate, broken free...no longer a prisoner. In that case, I would leave off the last six lines, which imbalance, take the poem in a whole unexpected and awkward direction. Much more strength in closing off with the line: things I want to explore
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