| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Olivia Weinkein on 12/10/03 at 12:12 AM wow. this blows me away. LOVE the feel of this. |
| Posted by Thomas K. Hunt on 12/10/03 at 01:19 AM This is outstanding.I'm adding it to my favorites |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 12/10/03 at 01:28 AM if i could curse, i would say oh, the s word... into the story we do delve, and have to look at ourselves... in the true spirit of your brillaint writing and mindblowing brain, i am dumbfounded and thinking... blessings... |
| Posted by Maryellen Lebeda-Parra on 12/10/03 at 02:48 AM this is definitely a max piece! even if your name was not on top i would know it was yours ;) |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 12/10/03 at 03:51 AM Man oh man! Max, do you have a gift! I exclaim because I am again awestruck with the profound impact of your work, this one in particular. In this poem you take me into the depths, you fly me with your tainted wings, you humble me with your humility, and the forgiveness resurrects me. This one definately goes into my favorites folder. |
| Posted by Jolie Jordan on 12/10/03 at 08:32 PM Max you are something else all together. this, this is... well, You can feel it. all over. |
| Posted by Rachelle Howe on 12/10/03 at 08:37 PM amen on the feeling aspect. o.O all i did was sit back, exhale, and say, "niiiiceee." with a slight wince. man. what a punch, max. |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 12/10/03 at 09:30 PM Ohhh, my dear sweet heaven. There are images here that reach levels of genius I can only dream of. The whole moving picture this paints is exquisite and masterful. Absolute brilliance. |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 12/10/03 at 09:46 PM wonderful...absolutely thought provoking and just wonderful... |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 12/10/03 at 11:11 PM Whoa! What a piece of work this is. From start to finish I was enthralled by the diction and images. The ending adds such a twist that leaves me speechless. Excellent! |
| Posted by Aaron Blair on 12/11/03 at 04:25 AM I like it. |
| Posted by Lindsay Sanders on 12/11/03 at 04:36 AM this is amazing. this line just blew me away "I capsize in an ocean of stares." whoa nelly. that was hot. ::smiles:: |
| Posted by Brian Francis on 12/11/03 at 03:39 PM Bravo This one is a powerful. Well said Max
--bf |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/11/03 at 05:21 PM Excellent descriptiveness, poetic story telling. Compelling read from beginning to end. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 12/11/03 at 08:28 PM From a vexatious beginning to a whimpered ending, emotionally charged poem of rejection and bitterness. Sarcasm screams out in the lines about forgiveness (to me at least). |
| Posted by Rachelle Howe on 10/05/04 at 02:51 PM and here i am, back again. *damn* damndamndamn. damndamndamndamn. i exhaled and my eyes went wide. it was a slice-and-dice that i most definitely let rip down my throat as i swallow. again. *drool.* |
| Posted by Lauren Singer on 01/22/08 at 12:15 AM a very beautiful and effective little tale of hope or something like it. |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 06/12/08 at 06:07 PM those last two stanzas really pop. i think you lost me a bit in the beginning with all of the abstract language and images (even though i knew what you were saying!) i love, however, the concept of burning pages of names to absolve people of their sins. that's really beautiful. |
