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like a whisper

by Michele Schottelkorb

Seek your substance

(like a whisper)

amidst the crumbling forest mountain face

 

Find your Beauty

(like a whisper)

among the scars and blood stained tissue

 

Discover your Passion

(like a whisper)

within the broken limbs in your Heart

 

Remember your Love

(like a whisper)

inside the dismantled, desecrated Earth

 

October 2003

11/15/2003

Author's Note: if one stops, for just a moment, and listens to the whispers of their world, it would be a wonder all the beauty they could find where they least expect it... i think this poem needs more... at a later date...

Posted on 11/16/2003
Copyright © 2020 Michele Schottelkorb

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Glenn Currier on 11/16/03 at 06:56 AM

Michele, you weave the two worlds of the human and the botanical in this poem like the treble and bass of a line of music... like you might move your left finger over your right hand to play something in the treble clef on the piano. You cause me to read your piece at different levels. Good work.

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 11/16/03 at 02:46 PM

I think this poem stands on its own, as it is. and there is something to be said about the essences that a sketch offers as opposed to a work that is more labored.

Posted by Don Coffman on 11/17/03 at 11:02 AM

Always something good to be found in the bad? Definitely true, in terms of what we make of them and the natural course of entropy. An excellent, ruminative poem.

Posted by Tim D Livingston on 11/20/03 at 06:49 AM

The rhythm and the repitition in this one works very well. It speaks of finding oneself in solitude and silence (like a whisper). Now that I have tried to sound profound, I must say that this too is beauteous!

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 11/21/03 at 02:30 AM

Straight, to the point and it flows well. But one need to stop. And stop the time for a while. Face to face. One ought to SEE rather than look. Yes, the poem needs some time and attention, you seem to be short of. Take your time, this is going to be a great piece.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 11/21/03 at 07:42 PM

A great verse that takes away the mundane and forces the reader to re-prioritize there life. The verse is the whisper of which you speak.

Posted by Laura Doom on 11/24/03 at 12:29 AM

It's usually the buzz of electricity and the hum of traffic I can hear - so I'm grateful for this reminder that there are 'natural' whispers to be heard, not least in the imagination. Yours is beautifully fertile :>]

Posted by Jean Mollett on 12/18/03 at 06:08 AM

Hi Michele, Like a Whisper, good one. Looks like a hit, everyone seems to like it. With many emotions in it.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 05/09/04 at 02:31 AM

Well done Mich......Charlie

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