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Quiet Waters
by Alex SmythTrees lean over the shallow pool
Spreading branches like a mother hen,
Leaves murmuring solace, assurance.
As my toes seek a place in the rocks, crimson crustacians
Jolt from their hiding places. Garish little memories.
Shocked at being exposed, they raise jagged claws
Only to realize their impotence. The color of passion
Having no power here, they scuttlebutt backwards,
Baptized into the current.
Peace restored, the smooth stones arch
To meet my feet, the waterline caresses my legs
As the breeze dances with my dress.
I savor this restful day in these waters of contentment,
As time and unforseen circumstances gather on the horizen. 09/12/2003 Author's Note: With a thanks for the encouragement. Click here to read :I Am Just A Drop Of Water:
Posted on 09/13/2003
Copyright © 2024 Alex Smyth
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 09/13/03 at 01:23 PM the beauty of perspective hey Alex? ... nice to see you writing again! ... great poem Alex :) |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/13/03 at 10:32 PM The last verse suggests there may well be a storm on the horizon.
The essence of tranquility so engagingly pictured. Takes me back to my childhood and the creek. |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 09/14/03 at 03:23 AM The scene created in the first stanza is tranquillising. In the background of this murmuring solace, one realizes the terror of the situation.'Water of contentment' is where this leads you, ending on a positive note. I am happy. So very happy. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 09/14/03 at 08:07 PM Regardless of the storm or the garish memories... treasure the moment... beautifully said, Smyth. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 09/15/03 at 03:40 AM Ripples of tranquility and a melancholy tone make this a read worthy of a lazy afternoon. Good stuff, Alex.
Peace... |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 09/15/03 at 11:08 AM one could take haven in your quiet waters, Alex. and rest the poet's head, weary of the turbid kind. |
| Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 09/16/03 at 03:53 AM I like your first stanza, very original and imaginative descriptions. It makes the poem very "you", if that makes sense at all :) |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 09/16/03 at 04:44 AM Hi Alex,
Quiet Waters, it's very lovely. We all next some quiet and peaceful times, now and then. May you receive peaceful times again. Hugs, Jean |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 09/16/03 at 06:09 PM Very spiritual and meditative. The main body is so relaxing that when you talk of time and unforeseen circumstances at the end, I immediately felt anxious. Great read that really had an effect. |
| Posted by Aaron Howard on 09/17/03 at 01:02 AM Great peace... makes me feel calm inside.. a nice mental picture conveyed in this piece.. reminds me of a great summer day down by the river.. thanks for the memories! =) |
| Posted by Vimal Rony on 09/23/03 at 12:32 AM Superb,Alex.Thank you for the imagery and the tranquility. |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 10/11/03 at 03:21 AM Very beautiful, vivid and refreshing. Your use of words and phrases is excellent and all flows along remarkably well. |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 10/27/03 at 09:31 AM Wooo Hoooo! .... a well deserved POTD - congratulations Alex! :) |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 10/27/03 at 12:38 PM Idealistic, picturesque, serene! Brings back some very wonderful memories of trips along the Atlantic Ocean, especially along the New England coast and Northwest Pacific Ocean. Congratulations on POTD! |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 10/27/03 at 12:50 PM POTTED! Congrats, Alex. This is soooooo well deserved! |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 10/27/03 at 05:17 PM delectable. I liked how we move from the soft sounds of the words in the first stanza, to the crustier ones of the next. Your imagery of nature is astounding. and the use of the auditory in words. |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 06/20/05 at 03:38 AM Alex, I was just doing a look see around and came upon this. Each phrase blends quietly and punctually into the next, but keeps the poem moving forward. Great imagery too. What a truly joyous read. :) |
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